I disagree with that playing games teach us about life because real life is stricter and more complicated than playing games. People should learn lives from their real experiences. Playing games cannot give objective notions for people.
I hope I can institute a theme park for poorer because never have they been there. It can fulfill my dream. It can be an attractive.
I agree with that watching TV is bad for children because it harmful their eyes. Children do not ration their time very well. Some programs are not suitable for them.
Cattle are the most important animal in my country because of many paddy fields in here. Cattle stand at the forefront of milk productions. Cattle can be raised for steaks.
I will give an animal to assist a child develop because children can be a person with a lot of patient. Then, they might become more independent. Children can be training to have a sense of responsibility.
I believe that students should be given several short vacations every year because one long vacation might make them lazy. Students can take a rest shortly and temporarily. Students can use the short holidays to discuss their homework with their peers.
I prefer to live in a modern apartment building because of the convenient transportation. Moreover, the public security is better than living in a traditional house. Furthermore, a modern apartment building might have an attached kindergarten.
深山高手們 別再幫我改寫句子 我只想知道文法有沒有錯謝謝您(非常謝謝您)
I think that advertising tell us about new products that may improve our lives because new products which improve our lives can stimulate consumption. People chase down a convenient life as time goes by. Moreover, people have a sense of curiosity to buying new products.
I prefer to spend free time indoor because of averting traffic jam. The weather is too hot and I do not need to spend much money.
I hope that my school can advocate and hold non-smoking activities because smoking is harmful students’ hearts and lungs. A lot of students might smoke on the campus. School stands at the forefront of limiting students to smoke.
- 非天使Lv 71 decade agoFavorite Answer
I disagree (with 去除，如I disagree with you or someone 才用with，子句加that) that playing games (will) teach us (anything) about life (,) because real life is stricter and more complicated than playing games. People should (learn from) their (lives) experiences. Playing games cannot give objective notions (to) people.
I hope I can (construct, 實體物的建造應使用construct) a theme park for (the poor, the 加 形容詞表這類的群體，如the rich 富人們) because (we had )never have (them 應使用受格) been there. It can fulfill my dream and can be an attractive (scenic spot).
I agree (with去除) that watching TV is (not only) harmful (to) (childrens’) eyes, (but also) children ( can) not (distribute) their time very well, and some programs are not suitable for them.
Cattle are the most important animal in my country because (there are) many paddy fields in here, (which 使用非限定關係代名詞，以減少使用cattle一字) (offer the majority of ) milk production(s 去除) (, and offer beef products also).
I will give (a pet like dog or cat) to assist (childrens' personality development) , that will (make them a person of patience, 請自行查閱make或使役動詞之用法), (more independent)(, and will )have a sense of responsibility.
I believe that students should be given several short vacations every year (instead of ) (a long one) , (because long vacation will make students indulge in entertainments ,and eacj short vacation is long enough for them to take a rest or discuss homeworks with peers.)
I prefer to live in a modern apartment building because (it always possess convenient equipments like elevator). (and) (its) public security is better than (a traditional department). Furthermore, a modern apartment building might (attached a kindergarten).
2008-09-01 17:49:37 補充：
I think that (an) advertising (can) tell(s) us about new products (which, that 也可以) may improve our lives (and, 原句此處重複 improve our lives這句話，應簡化) can stimulate consumption.
2008-09-01 17:56:32 補充：
People (always) chase (down去除，chase down 是找出的意思，此處應指追逐) convenient (lives, 因people 指大眾，是複數) (as time goes by以前面之always取代較順及通俗). Moreover, people (like to give new products a try,原句 to 應加原形動詞buy , 而有好奇心買新產品似乎沒有試用新產品來得表達完整).
2008-09-01 18:01:17 補充：
I prefer to spend free time indoor because of (averting去除，直接列出後面各項即可) traffic jam，( hot weather) and I (can save some of my daily expenditure, 如寫I do not need to spend much money, 我不必花很多錢，那意思是仍需花some money, 不是很正確).
2008-09-01 18:09:55 補充：
I hope that my school can (strictly perform, 禁煙的規定是既有的，只要嚴格執行即可) non-smoking activities because smoking is harmful (for) students’ hearts and lungs.
2008-09-01 18:11:30 補充：
(as many, 如此語意上才會銜接上句) students (might去除，是事實就不必使用might字) smoke on (the去除) campus. School (should) stands at the forefront of (banning, 直接就禁止了吧) students (smoking).
2008-09-01 18:14:03 補充：
我從來沒刪除過文章 雖然您的方式 不是我想要的
您是我的良師 大家都是 所以雖然我使用匿名發問
可是 我還是有良心的學生 虛心授教
教導 給 需要的人唷
謝謝您花您寶貴的時間 教導我 謝謝^^
2008-09-02 22:37:58 補充：
我前一陣想多搜尋蘇麗文的報導，結果搜到有人以蘇麗文為榜樣想請人幫他中翻英，於是第一次接觸了 Kimo 知識+
不過最想跟你說的是，你學習的精神超佳，英文也比我在你這個年齡時好，可是我以前也是只重文法，現在我對usage感觸特別深，覺得國外小孩先學usage, 所以文法變得不是問題了。 與你共勉！
- FTLv 61 decade ago