幫我check一下這句英文-homosexuality

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People who have identified their sexual genre differed from their physiological bodies can just conceal their real sexual identity from being regarded as weirdo. 

我自己寫的 
請高手幫我分析一下 (文法, 語意, 用詞, 用字)
或是改寫更好的都可以
任何的指教 請麻煩無私的給予 謝謝!

Elisa · Accepted Answer

Corrections and explanations to your grammar and word usage errors.  
 
(1) People who have discovered their gender identity, (which is) different from their biological sex, can just conceal their real sexual preference, (in order) to prevent themselves from being regarded as weirdoes (by others).
 
“who have identified with their sexual orientation” is a restrictive clause used to modify people.  The clause is restrictive because it is essential information.  Meaning the people who have identified with their sexual orientation, not any other people
 
“which is different from their biological sex” is a nonrestrictive clause and you can delete this clause without impacting the meaning of the sentence.  “which is” can be omitted  
 
(in order) to prevent themselves from being regarded as weirdoes (by others). 不定詞片語, passive voice
 
See link below for more details on 不定詞片語: http://www.chompchomp.com/terms/infinitivephrase.htm 
 
 
Grammar error:
People can just conceal their real sexual preference from being regarded as weirdoes.
=> If you write like this, weirdoes will be used to modify “their real sexual preference”.
 
For example:
She can just shut the door from being called weirdoes.
She can just shut the door to prevent herself from being called weirdoes.
 
See the difference?
 
(2) People who have identified with their sexual orientation, (being) different from their biological sex, can just conceal their real gender identity, to prevent themselves from being regarded as weirdoes.
 
Being 分詞構句修飾 sexual orientation.  “being” can be omitted.
 
 
(3) People who have identified with their sexual orientation, which differs from their biological sex, can just conceal their real gender identity, to prevent themselves from being regarded as weirdoes
 
 
“which differs from their biological sex” is a nonrestrictive clause.

2008-08-17 14:10:00 補充：
(4) People who have discovered their gender identity, differing from their biological sex, can just conceal their real sexual preference from being regarded as weirdoes.

Differing 分詞構句,現在分詞,修飾 gender identity

2008-08-17 14:10:26 補充：
See reference on restrictive and non-restrictive clauses http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/clauses.htm

2008-08-17 20:42:48 補充：
By the way, sexual identity is not a wrong word but I feel sexual orientation or gender identity better describes what you wanted to state here.

Also what I stated as grammar error was a sentence that will confuse the readers.

Anonymous · Answer

nana你真是太強了

好佩服你

Nana · Answer

People who have identified their sexual gender differed from their physiological bodies can just conceal their real sexual identity from being regarded as weirdo. 

翻譯 
已經確認性慾性別(即心理性別)不同於生理性別的人
仍然能以隱瞞其真正的性別認同 以避免被認為是怪物
改錯字
 genre 風俗畫,世態畫 在此處上下文不合 應是誤植
 改成 gender 性別 比較合乎上下文的需要 
文法解析
People (who have identified their sexual gender which differed from their physiological bodies) can just conceal their real sexual identity from being regarded as weirdo. 
1.()內       是people的補語 補充說明people
2.which 指的是 sexual gender 原文省略which
  這一段也可以寫成
  People who have identified their sexual gender 
   difference from their physiological bodies....
   這樣的表達更清楚
3.整句的主詞是people 動詞是conceal  
  受詞是 their real sexual identity 
4.from being regarded as 避免被認為是....

2008-08-16 16:28:46 補充：
更正  更正

文法解析2.

People who have identified their sexual gender  different from their physiological bodies...

2008-08-16 17:31:02 補充：
版大  我覺得您的程度已經很好了

如果不是剛好看到有錯字

我想根本不需要修正

2008-08-17 21:55:59 補充：
Not only the asker master 阿錩,I learned from Elisa's reply,too.

Thanks for Elisa's reply.

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