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Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesBooks & Authors · 1 decade ago

What do you think of my writing

http://betterworld.page.tl/BW-STORY-PAGE.htm

The link is above. The first story only

Update:

Some grammar is the style. It is a short story so it will not become to long. The blue is not said out loud

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Eh, its OK, there are areas that you can improve. Your grammar is off in a number of spots. In your attempts to use different descriptive adjectives, you go off course as well.

    The story itself seems that it could be interesting, but it gets confusing quickly- which is not good considering its only a few paragraphs long.

    Anyway, its a start. You clearly have some ability, keep writing and I suspect you can develop.

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