What do you think of my writing
The link is above. The first story only
Some grammar is the style. It is a short story so it will not become to long. The blue is not said out loud
- bmwdriver11Lv 71 decade agoFavorite Answer
Eh, its OK, there are areas that you can improve. Your grammar is off in a number of spots. In your attempts to use different descriptive adjectives, you go off course as well.
The story itself seems that it could be interesting, but it gets confusing quickly- which is not good considering its only a few paragraphs long.
Anyway, its a start. You clearly have some ability, keep writing and I suspect you can develop.