請英文高手來幫我~~~「自傳」修改錯誤呀~20點

I was born in May 12,1983.My birthplace is Yongkang City, Tainan County ,Taiwan (R.O.C.). I have a simple family. My father is a teacher. he teaches Chinese lauguages in the some private Institute of Technology.My mother is housewife but also does a part-time job in the factory making the electronic parts.... show more I was born in May 12,1983.My birthplace is Yongkang City, Tainan County ,Taiwan (R.O.C.).


I have a simple family. My father is a teacher. he teaches Chinese lauguages in the some private Institute of Technology.My mother is housewife but also does a part-time job in the factory making the electronic parts.


I was gradated from the Applied Information the comprehensive high school of the Affiliated Senior High School of National University of Tainan. My junior high was study in the Applied Foreign Languages of Lan Yang Institute of Technology.


No matter the Document Processing of Computer or Bussiness,Accountancy,International Trade,the Economics or English Language,all have already slightly waded.


Although I was not specially for some subject, I hope that I will learning experience very much on my future job.




My job is regared as the first in my life. I take my responsibilities seriously and hoping everything is done with perfect for my job.


Before I have been worked in a private convenience store for four years.


In the four years, I experienced the harmoniously interpersonal relationship with more skillful for the service industry.


I can respect senior directions, because they makes me to get ahead and doesn’t make mistakes.


My characteristic is rational and centred. I hope to learn more experiences in my job and my life.


I wish Bosses could understand my mind that I will take seriously work in my job.


更正的時候,可否也可以給予解釋,為何需要如此更改,謝謝高手^^~
Update: 可是沒有解釋,我就不曉得我錯的原因了...= =...
Update 2: I was gradated from the Applied Information....那段我是要說明我高職和二專讀什麼…

「我畢業於國立台南大學附屬高級中學(以前的台南高農)的綜合高中的資訊應用學程。...

英文好難呀,快瘋了...
Update 3: My job is regared as the first in my life. I take my responsibilities seriously and hoping everything is done with perfect for my job.

這段是說

「在我的人生中我視工作為第一。我重視責任和希望對於我的工作,我都可以做的很完美...


快瘋了...
Update 4: 請問,如何用英文思考?? 怎麼讓英文成為我生命中的一部份呢??快瘋了...
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