心茹 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

幫忙改一下英文作文

題目~你如何看待自信?寫一篇文章,第一段說明你的看法,第二段說明你懷抱何種自信?並舉例你如何建立自信??

I think the confidence can bring courage to face troubles.When you lose confidence ,doing anything don't be full of energy.It does not efficient,too.In my opinion,own confidence can face anything bravely.

I have a stupid confidence.Take an example,once I had to show my point then stand on stage and

tell them with clear and loudly voice.At that time,I just know to tell them what my view.In other hand,I don't

think too much , just doing my job.So I think it is my stupid confidence.

Sometimes,I like to communicate with somebody because I can learn more knowledge.When talking

to the same topic,I feel pleasure a lot.That is one of my increse confidence ways.In the end,I believe you

own your heart and you can conquer any problems in the future.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    Sometimes, in life our confidence is challenged in different situations. The result of losing confidence in such a process is the lost of enthuiasim and and energy to facing problems. This characteristic of human nature is weak because of the negative cycle one falls into. In my opinion, a well supported confidence have the ability to face and solve all problems.

    I have a strong confidence. For example, one time I had to give a

    speech on stage, standing infront of the crowd. During the process, I

    had two things going in my head. First, I had a plan prepared so I

    was ready to give my sppech. Two, I thought if this is a task I have to

    perform anyways, why not do it perfectly? This rhetorical question

    gave me the ability to focus on the tast at hand instead of getting distracted because of my

    fears. So I think I have a strong confidence.

    To further demonstrate the formidability of my confidence. I like to

    say I'm very social. I like having conversations with people because

    of the knowledge gained and the pleasantness of the envolvement on

    the conversation. This personality and hobby of mine (communicating with people) is not only an illustration of my confidence, but also a

    helpful excerize that increases my confidence as well.

    On the final note, I believe that as long as you believe yourself and be confident, there are no problems that can stand in your way.

    Don't use stupid confidence. Use strong. Calling yourself stupid

    makes people laugh therefore devaule the impact of your essay.

    2008-07-20 01:32:33 補充:

    task* not tast*

    Source(s): Me
  • 1 decade ago

    單grammar的錯誤如下

    1. I think the confidence can bring courage to face troubles.

    .

    a. confidence 不可數 不加冠詞(a an the)

    (b). 文章一開始 提到的名詞 通常讀者未知 用a an

    the是代表已知的東西 或前文提過

    何況 你這句 是在闡述你認為的事實

    .

    When you lose confidence ,doing anything don't be full of energy.

    .

    a. 動名詞當主詞 動詞要單數

    b. full is an adjective. -> isn't full of energy

    .

    It does not efficient,too.In my opinion,own confidence can face anything bravely.

    .

    a. efficient is an adjective. ->It isn't efficient.

    b. 肯定的一樣用too, 否定用 either-> It isn't efficient, either.

    .

    I have a stupid confidence.

    .

    a.confidence 不可數 不加冠詞(a an the)

    .

    Take an example,once I had to show my point then stand on stage and tell them with clear and loudly voice.

    .

    a. then 不是介係詞 不可連接2個動詞show my point, stand on stage, and tell them with....

    b. 3動詞or名詞 次一起時用法 ....a, b, 介係詞 c.....

    c前的" , " 連老外都有爭議 可加可不加

    c. voice is a noun, and loudly is an adverb.

    修飾名詞的只能100%是形容詞-> loud

    .

    At that time,I just know->(knew) to tell them what my view.

    a. 你可以查查know

    通常後面只接 名詞 or 名詞子句

    所以我建議刪掉 to tell them 就變成名詞子句

    b. 子句要有主詞及動詞

    你的主詞 my view 動詞是was

    在句子中的名詞子句 不用倒裝......what my view was.

    .

    .

    .

    In other hand,I don't ->(didn't )think too much , 少介係詞(and )just did my job. So(, 正式寫作我建議加", ") I think it is my stupid confidence.

    .

    .

    Sometimes,I like to communicate with somebody because I can learn more knowledge.

    a. 邏輯問題 knowledge 不是用學的 (用get or acquire)

    .

    .

    When talking to the same topic,I feel pleasure a lot.

    a. talk to 的受詞是 "人"-> 用about

    .

    That is one of my increse(increase) confidence ways.

    a. increase is a verb(or noun). 根據前後文你是用adj->increasing

    .

    In the end,I believe you own your heart and you can conquer any problems in the future.

    any 後必接單數 problem

    .

    .

    2008-07-19 23:27:51 補充:

    對不起

    any 後可加複數

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  • 1 decade ago

    I think confidence can bring courage to face troubles.

    confidence 前面不要加 the

    When you lose confidence ,doing anything you wont belive in your self.

    蛤?你沒有電?或力氣? 相信會比較好吧 "做任何事都沒辦相信自己"

    It's not efficient,too.In my opinion,own confidence can face anything bravely.

    不能用 "It does" 要用 Its's not (it is not)

    I have a stupid confidence once .

    我"有一次"有一個很笨的把握 你沒有加 "有一次"

    For an example,once I had to show my point then I stand on stage and

    我需要給他們看一個的意識 所以 "我" 要上台

    tell them with clear and loudly voice. At that time,I just know to tell them what my thought was.

    我的view 你是要說 看法嗎? 用 thought 如果是我的意識 用point

    In

    the other hand,I did think too much , just doing my job.

    另一方面 要加 The in the other hand

    So I think my confidence is stupid .

    句子掉換 文法錯誤

    Sometimes,I like to communicate with somebody because I can learn more knowledge.When talking

    in the same topic,I feel pleasure a lot.That is one of my increse confidence ways.

    是在那個主題裡面 In

    In the end,I believe you

    own your heart and you can conquer any problems in the future.

    有空格就是有錯誤

    我都打好了 你可以把中文砍掉 錯的都是小地方不用太介意

    2008-07-19 22:45:54 補充:

    對了排版照原來的排

    我只是加了解說 讓你明白一下!

    Source(s): 我自己
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