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鈞鼎 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

修改英文作文,題目:是否同意再交通壅塞路段徵收稅

這是我練習托福的作文文章

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文章如下:

With the advent of development of industrialization and modernization, people who not only struggle for their daily life but also earn much money gather in the big city having convenient transportation system and high-paid job bringing about some problems such as traffic jam or air pollution resulting from crown; therefore, some government concerning about tidy of tidy have been ready to tax on driver accessing over busy street in order to reduce air contamination and increase tax income. Although this act is based on diminishing pollution, I think it may cause other problem and no aid on original problem. The reasons why I think so will be elaborate on following paragraphs.

To begin with, it is in terms of check that it could decelerate speed of car stream and worsen traffic jam in rush hours due to the fact that every driver passing the check have to slow down their speed paying the fee. Moreover, drivers may regard government as wanting money rather than doing something for environment.

Next to go would be, It is in views of different affordable ability that taxing on drivers may augment disparity between rich and poor. Many poor can't sustain the extra money they have to pay every day; however, rich and middle think it as cheap price so that they can afford it. In other word, poor have less chance to enter cities through hot streets than rich and less chance to earn higher salary than opulence.

Last but not least, taxing on hot street lead to drivers choosing other substitutable streets to assess the cities, and the pollution still come into existence in another place. That is, that government only receives money from citizen can't reduce contamination efficiently and need a lot of education of taking public transportation. Consequently, not only government but also us need to know the important of environment making the action plan about abating pollution success.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    With the inevitable development towards a greater extent of industrialization and modernization, people drawn to the city for better pay and convenient transportation would face problems such as traffic jam or air pollution resulting from crown (what crown?); therefore, some governments (concerning about tidy of tidy???) have been ready to put tax on driver access over busy street in order to reduce air pollution and to increase tax income. Although this act is based on reducing pollution, I think it may cause other problem and may have little effect on the original problem. The reasons why I think so are elaborated in following paragraphs.

    To begin with, the set up of toll points would slow down the car flow and worsen traffic jam during rush hours due to the fact that every driver passing the check have to come to a halt to pay their fees. Moreover, drivers may be led to believe that the government only cares for the money rather than for the environment.

    In terms of the ability of paying off the toll, claiming tax from motorists from across the socioeconomical spectrum would augment disparity between rich and poor. Many poor can't make ends meet with the extra money they have to pay every day on road toll; however, the well off citizens would think it is a small price to pay. In other word, the poor would have a less chance to enter cities through busy streets than the rich and a less chance to earn higher salary. (really?)

    Last but not least, taxing on busy street lead to drivers choosing alternative paths to assess to the cities, and therefore the pollution still comes into existence in other places. Overall, if the government only receives money from citizen, it can't reduce contamination efficiently and need a lot of effort to make the public aware of the importance of taking public transportation. Consequently, not only government but also us as citizens need to know the importance of saving the environment.

    2008-07-16 15:20:03 補充:

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    6 years ago

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