小自 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

【急件】請您撥個控幫我批改一下我的英文自我介紹,謝謝!

My name is XXX. I am easy-going and can get along with anyone well. To my parents and friends, I am a little "talkative", but it is not bad to be this way. To me, this means that I love to express my opinions and enjoy communicating with others. Another good trait about me is "active". Whenever I have questions I discuss them with my classmates or consult my teachers. I never put off what I can do untill tomorrow, and I know that actions speak louder than words. Moreover, I like to ride bicycle to anywhere I want to go and listen to all kinds of musics in my leisure time. I usually improve myself by attending some computer classes or some English classes. Therefore, please give me an opportunity to be your student. Thanks.

這是本人明天(6/30)參加大學面試的稿子

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謝謝大家

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  • 1 decade ago
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    請問你要說多久

    這樣的長度大約1分鐘喔

    面試儘量口語化 比較好理解

    太難怕會說錯

    所以我會把你的稿子儘量改成口語一點

    當然文法句型絕對不會錯

    打( )是你可以補充的地方

    Good morning/afternoon, professors. My name is XXX.

    I am an easy-going person and I can get along well with anyone.

    (Why? You didn’t explain why you are easy-going. Talkative is not equaled to easy-going. )

    My parents and friends say I am a little talkative, but I think it quite good,

    because to me, being talkative means that I love to express my ideas and enjoy communicating with others. (So I make a lot of bosom friends…)

    Another good trait about me is that I always take the initiative. (主動)

    Whenever I have questions, I try to discuss with my classmates or consult my teachers.

    I never put off what I can do until tomorrow, and I believe that actions speak louder than words. (For example, I take actions right after I decide something…)

    Moreover, I like to ride bicycle to anywhere I want to go and listen to all kinds of music in at my leisure. (ride a bike跟主動有什麼關係…?)

    I usually attend some computer classes or English classes to improve my ability to adjust myself to the future working environment. (我猜你應該是這個意思)

    Therefore, I think it is proper for me to get into your department.

    I will do my best in every class and essay, because I always take action before others.

    (要多說在他的系上會做什麼事) (記得呼應main point)

    Thanks you very much.

    Source(s): 我自己
  • Sigma
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    My name is XXX. I am easy-going and can get along with anyone well. To my parents and friends, I am a little "talkative", but it is not bad to be in this way. To me, this means that I love to express my opinions and enjoy communicating with others. Another good trait about me is that I am "active". Whenever I have questions, I discuss with my classmates or consult my teachers. I never put off what I can do untill tomorrow, and I know that actions speak louder than words. As for my hobbies, I like to ride bicycle to anywhere I want to go and listen to all kinds of musics in my leisure time. I have been trying to improve myself by attending some computer classes or some English classes. Therefore, please give me an opportunity to be your student. Thanks.

    ## improve 這個動詞很少使用usually 來修飾

    Source(s): myself; 祝福心想事成
  • 1 decade ago

    My name is XXX. I am easy-going and always get along with anyone well. To my parents and friends, I am quite "talkative", but it is not bad to be this way. To me, this means that I love to express my opinions and enjoy communicate with others. Another good trait about me is "active". Whenever I have questions I discuss them with my classmates or consult my teachers. I never put off what I can do untill tomorrow because I know that actions speak louder than words. Moreover, I like to ride bicycle to anywhere which I want to go and listen to all kinds of musics in my free time. I usually improve myself by join computer classes and English classes. Therefore, i believe i can be a positive student in the future. Please give me an opportunity to be your student. Thanks.

    Source(s): 自己
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