please look at poem. your view?

Tittle:Distorted vision By Tia Metcher

Reflection in the mirror,

Is distorted by a picture,

To portray to be another,

Is more faker than the other?

Silicon bubs,

Fat puffy lips,

Porcelain skin,

Fake tan skin,

Distorted image in the mirror,

Windex cleaner won’t make clearer,

Distorted image is been portrayed,

I was not born to appear this way,

“What is this that I see?”

“Is Dolly Parton in front of me?”

I do believe it’s me,

How the hell did I not see?

Distorted image is been portrayed,

I was not born to appear this way,

I’m quiet happy being me,

Whether I’m fat or skinny,

I shall hold my head up high,

And thank, that I’m alive,

I’m quiet happy being me,

That is all I won’t to be.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    I guess you should fix how you written your poem. Like the first two stanzas have four lines each and the other stanzas have two lines... (Just my opinion)

    And the ending is a little wrong in grammar...

    I shall hold my head up high,

    And thank, that I’m alive, (Who are you thanking to?)

    I’m quiet happy being me,

    That is all I won’t to be. (you will not to be or you want to be?)

    Bye, take care.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Distorted image in the mirror,

    Windex cleaner won’t make clearer

    that bit had a really good flow. its good it goes through alot of Questioning then resolves on a healthy note by looking and forgetting what everyone else wants and just wanting to see yourself.

  • buy a video camera at Target for $100. When you want to stare at your self connect the camera to tv and then look at your self. you will se the bright big picture.

    Mirrors distorts the naked eye vision. You will be happier and see youself in a brighter reality way. Thanks beacuse I stopped doing this since I moved and will go back to my roots.

    You can than practice reading outloud or whatever it is to get what you want others to see that you knosw is facial art or the way you walk.

    you need a $25 tri-pod.

    please apply this it wil change your eyes visin of yourself in the best solution.

  • 1 decade ago

    think the begining started off well but it lacked towards the end. The final lyrics were quite good but some in the middle were a bit flakey. in my honest opinion xx

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  • 4 years ago

    That's really great. I'm taking creative writing right now and all we do is poetry. This would easily get a 100. good work

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Oh who cares? I just love it! I think it means that when you look at the moirror you see a image... you! And you don't care what those people are, only yourself

  • 1 decade ago

    it looks like good but boring at the end

  • 1 decade ago

    ur quiet happy being you?

    u mean quite...but i wouldn't be so thrilled

  • 1 decade ago

    I love it.

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