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I was deeply interested in developing a career with ABC Limited. I understood that starting a career with giant and successful leader in the industry would be the best for graduates. As ABC Limited is a premier company in Information and Communications worldwide, ABC Limited would be the ideal place for me to start my career.

I believe that I can contribute my energy, passion and hardworking attitude to ABC Limited in order to help achieving company’s goals and ambitions.

I am proud to represent the organizations that I belong. I was First Runner-up of Choir Competition, representing ABC Choir team as a Tenor. (2008) I was the University representative and performer in ‘Music Show’, organized by A, B, C and D. (2002) I was the School Representative of badminton team and basketball team of ABC School. (2000) I was the school representative and Champion of Joint-school Chess Competition. (1999).

I am an active person so I join many executive committees. I was the Preparation Committee of ABC, contributing ideas to Mr. LEE Ka Sing. (2008). I was the Studio Manager of DEF and General Secretary of GHI in my School. (2007) I was also the Orientation Leader (2007) and Organizing Committee (2007) of my School. I was a Vice-Chairperson and a treasurer of different student bodies in YYY primary school. I gained valuable experiences from organizing different functions with different bodies. I improved my commitment, leadership and communication skills.

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  • Baggio
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    1 decade ago
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    I am deeply interested in developing my career with ABC Limited. I understand that starting a career with a huge and successful leader in the industry would be the best option for graduates. As ABC Limited is a premier company in Information and Communications worldwide, your Company would be the ideal place for me to start my career.

    I believe that I can contribute all my knowledge, passion and hardworking attitude to ABC Limited in order to help achieving the Company’s goals and targets.

    I am proud to represent the organizations that I belonged to. I was the First Runners-up of Choir Competition, representing ABC Choir team as a Tenor in the year 2008 I was the University’s representative and performer in the ‘Music Show’ (no,) organized by A, B, C and D. in 2002 In 2000 I was the School Representative of badminton team and basketball team of ABC School. I was the School representative and Champion of Joint-school Chess Competition in 1999.

    I am an active person so I was elected in many executive committees. I was the Preparation Committee of ABC, contributing ideas to Mr. LEE Ka Sing in 2008. In 2007 I was the Studio Manager of DEF and General Secretary of GHI in my School. In the same year I was also the Orientation Leader and Organizing Committee of my School. I was the Vice-Chairperson and the Treasurer of different student bodies in YYY Primary School . I gained valuable experiences from organizing different functions with different organizations. I improved my commitment, leadership and communication skills through all these activities and capacities.

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