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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

我的文章連接詞不知道有沒有到十個呢?可以幫我加麼

Dear Tina:The information in nowadays is flourishing, want to store the data that oneself needs at any time?Be an university student no matter where it is along with take again convenient, you can choose of MP3!

Portable disc function:Every kind of file store:homework in the containment school and company data can along with bring to walk and use super convenience.With insert to namely use:Use standard USB connector plug, the file encrypts:Can encrypt a file, keep data from leaking function.The communication interface of USB.The download delivers sooner and soon and conveniently and 7 color LCDbackground light,inside set up FM radio, multiple language menus, voice recording.Use the power:ordinary AAA battery.We provide for the all-new product, and provide following assurance:Warranty period:A year.Warranty scope:The product breaks down.

The merchandise purchased all possesses after taking goods completion free for seven days appreciate a period, but send back a merchandise to must be all-new appearance and packing integrity (include a merchandise, enclosure, inside over-wrap, random document,

present...etc.), otherwise forgive not to accept return of goods.

以上文章可以幫我解決一下ㄇ謝謝

Update:

現在的資訊發達,想隨時儲存自己所需要的資料嗎?身為大學生不管在哪裡隨身攜帶又方便,你可以選擇的mp3!

隨身碟功能 各式檔案儲存:包含學校作業及公司資料可隨身帶著走, 使用起來超方便 隨插即用: 使用標準USB插頭,檔案加密: 可加密檔案, 防止資料外洩功能 USB 傳輸介面;下載傳輸更快速、便捷

所購買商品在取貨完成後均享有七天免費鑑賞期,但退回商品必須是全新狀態且包裝完整(包含商品、附件、內外包裝、隨機文件、 贈品等 ),否則恕不接受退貨。

這是我的中文翻譯,要打一封英文促銷信必須要有十個不同連接詞可以請大家幫幫忙ㄇ??拜託很急~~~急~~~急

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  • 1 decade ago
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    你要不要附上中文

    你的文章可能有些要修改的地方

    修改完再來研究你的連接詞

    我目前只有看到五個and

    一個after

    一個but

    可是有不少文法錯誤

    2008-06-03 22:35:58 補充:

    The information in nowadays is flourishing, want to store the data that oneself needs at any time?Be an university student no matter where it is along with take again convenient, you can choose of MP3!

    ==> Information nowadays is flourishing, wanna save the data you need at anytime? As a university student, wherever you are, you can choose this portable and convenient mp3.

    連結詞 wherever and

    Portable disc function:Every kind of file store:homework in the containment school and company data can along with bring to walk and use super convenience.With insert to namely use:Use standard USB connector plug, the file encrypts:Can encrypt a file, keep data from leaking function.The communication interface of USB.The download delivers sooner and soon and conveniently and 7 color LCDbackground light,inside set up FM radio, multiple language menus, voice recording.Use the power:ordinary AAA battery.We provide for the all-new product, and provide following assurance:Warranty period:A year.Warranty scope:The product breaks down.

    Portable disc functions: File storage, including school homework or office data, which you can carry anytime, anywhere. Furthermore, its user-friendly. Plug and Play: With standard USB connection, you can use it easily. File encryption: You can keep your files safely when you encrypt files with our product. USB interface: You can download or upload files quickly and easily.

    連接詞 and or when

    2008-06-03 22:37:20 補充:

    最後一段

    We offer 10 days warranty after you purchase our prodts. If you return our product, please return the whole package. All the accessories, the manual, along with gifts must be included in the package. We apprecitate your cooperation.

    連結詞 after, if, along with

    2008-06-03 22:39:12 補充:

    你的文章本來就沒有很多連接詞

    我已經盡可能地加了一些連接詞

    但是現在腦袋有點搾乾 想不到那邊還可以加了

    如果你中文裡面能加一些會比較好改

    2008-06-04 10:56:09 補充:

    第一段文法不對

    我照中文改過

    只是最後一句改成 身為一個大學生 不論你在那邊都可以選擇這個可攜帶又方便的MP3

    (你的中文裡 功能裡完全沒提到MP3 的功能 但是抱歉 你的英文我有點半知半解不敢亂改)

    我的功能是照著你的中文翻的

    Furthermore, its user-friendly.此外 使用很簡便(使用者操控容易)

    2008-06-04 10:58:57 補充:

    Plug and Play 隨插即用 USB介面 使用簡單

    You can keep your files safely when you encrypt files with our product

    當你以我們的產品加密檔案 就可以更安全地保存檔案

    2008-06-04 10:59:29 補充:

    最後一段是一樣的

    不過我加了一句

    We apprecitate your cooperation.

    感謝你的配合

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