Is this what poetry is meant to be?

I aske for your comments


Falling locks of river water
cascading down her face
An ever faithful, Earthen daughter
recovering from grace
Castle peak of natural stone
stands as her tall brow
Ever dreamt to dance alone
so I will leave her now
-Gaia is worn away
Update: Edit; "Recovering from mortal grace"
Update 2: This was actually inspired by a drawing that Rouxe gave me today... it has to be seen to understand but I hope this poem does it justice...
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