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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

幫我評價這篇文章和挑出這篇文章的錯誤

There is a girl called Alice. She likes flower very much. One day she bought a pot of roses. She put it in most conspicuous place of her room. She took care of it very carefully. She loved appreciating it when she just woke up. But she did not like the thorns on the roses at all. Every time she wanted to touch the roses,these thorns always hurt her fingers.

Because of this,Alice cut off the thorns. She likes the roses without the thorns. But a few days after,this roses got more and more weak. At last they died. Alice was very surprised. She felt very sad,but she also learn a lesson. Too much care can create problems.

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  • 心星
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago
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    There was a girl called Alice. She liked flowers very much. One day she bought a pot of roses. She put them at the most conspicuous place of her room. She took care of them very carefully. She loved watched them when she just woke up. However, she did not like the thorns on the roses at all. Every time she wanted to touch the roses, these thorns always hurt her fingers.

    Because of this, Alice cut off all the thorns. She liked the roses without thorns. But a few days later, these roses became weaker and weaker. Eventually they died, Alice was so astonished. She felt very sad(或: She was very upset), but she had learned a lesson. Over care could also cause troubles.

  • 1 decade ago

    的確是很難取舍。在細讀之後,我選擇了daomingku。他所翻譯的字句比較通順,文法也正確。(為什麼無法投票?)

  • 1 decade ago

    兩位回答的都表達文中的意思。我的建議:

    There was a girl named Alice who liked flowers very much. One day she bought a pot of roses. She put it at the most eye-catching spot in her room. She took care of the flowers very carefully. The moment she woke up, she would attend to them. However, she did not like the thorns of the roses. Every time she touched the roses, her fingers would be hurt by the thorns of the flowers. Because of this, Alice cut off the thorns. She prefered roses without thorns. A few days later, the roses withered. Finally, this pot of roses faded and died. Alice was very shocked. She felt very sad too. However, she learnt a lesson. Care beyond necessity can create unnecessary problems.

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  • 1 decade ago

    There is a girl named Alice. She likes flowers very much. One day she bought a pot of roses. She put it in the most conspicuous spot in her room. She took care of it very carefully. She loved it, especially waking up to it everyday in the morning. However, she did not like the thorns on the roses. Every time she wanted to touch the roses, the thorns would hurt her fingers.

    Because of this, Alice cut off the thorns and was very satisfied. But after a few days, the roses became weaker and weaker. At last the pot of rose died. Alice was very surprised. She felt very sad, but she also learned a lesson. Too much care can create problems.

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