angel asked in 社會及文化語言 · 1 decade ago

將以例出的條件寫一封商業英文信?

You are May Wong. you work for Collins, a businessman, as his secretary. Mr Collins is going to ask you to draft a letter for him. read the information carefully and write the letter.

1.Things to include in the letter to Mr Robinson:

20 cases of Australian Red Wine he ordered a week ago out of stock

Due to circumstances outside our control

Sorry that earliest shipment won't arrive in HK until 13 December

Ask him to try our Spanish Red Wine, they are as good as the Australian Red Wine

Give 20% discount if he takes them, ask him to clear the outstanding balance of $30000 as soon as possible.

2.Name card of Robinson:

Swan's Restaurant

12 Robinson road, Mid Levels, Hong Kong

Jack Robinson

Restaurant Manager

Update:

收件人是 Jack Robinson 。

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  • 1 decade ago
    Best Answer

    23 April 2008

    Swan's Restaurant

    12 Robinson road, Mid Levels, Hong Kong

    Attention: Mr. Jack Robinson

    Restaurant Manager

    Dear Sir,

    Re: Order of 20 cases of Australian Red Wine

    We refer to the captioned matter.

    We are extremely regret to advise you that the captioned order made on

    last week can not be available immediately. To our best knowledge, there is a

    shortage in supply of the products to HK which is beyond our control.

    The earliest possible shipment of products to HK will be until 13 December

    We assume that the products are urgently required. In this regard, we are

    pleased to offer an alternative of the Spanish Red Wine of which the

    brand image and quality are as good as the Australian Red Wine. To make

    the deal more attractive, a 20% discount will be offered only on this special

    order. We are appreciated if you would have considered our offer.

    Should you have interests, please feel free to contact the our May Wong

    at (phone no) for the delivery arrangement. Further, we would like to remind you that an outstanding balance of $30,000 has not been made. Please kindly

    settle it at your earliest convenience.

    We look forward to receiving your favorable reply.

    For and on behalf of

    XXX Company

    ________________

    Mr. Collins

    The Manager

    2008-04-23 17:31:37 補充:

    1. our May Wong 前面冇the 字, 打多了

    2. To make our deal more attractive 可改為 To sweeten our deal (較商業寫法)

    2008-04-24 21:58:29 補充:

    We are extremely regret to advise you that the captioned order made on

    last week can not be available immediately.

    amend as:

    We are extremely regret to advise you that the captioned order made on

    last week can not be available immediately as the products are temporarily

    out of stock.

  • Frank
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago

    Our Ref.: xxxxx

    Swan's Restaurant By Mail / Hand

    12, Robinson Road,

    Mid Levels,

    Hong Kong

    23 April 2008

    Attn.: Mr. Jack Robinson - Restaurant Manager

    Dear Sir,

    Re:Ordering of Australian Red Wine

    Thank you very much for your purchasing of 20 cases of Australian Red Wine last week. I'm very sorry to inform you that we were shortage of this product after checking our stock. The earliest shipment arrived Hong Kong from Australia will be on 13th December. We are grateful if you will try our Spanish Red wine. They are as good as our Australian Red wine. In addition, we are pleased to provide 20% discount for your purchasing of our Spanish Red Wine.

    Moreover, we are appreciated that you can clear the outstanding balance of $30000 as soon as possible.

    Thank you for your kind attention.

    Yours faithfully,

    For and on behalf of

    XXXXXXXX Company

    _________________________

    Collins

    <Position>

    c.c. Head Office

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