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多比 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請幫我評論我的英文作文,因為不久我要代表我們學校參家英文作文

My favorite subject

What is your favoritr subject? When it is comes to my favorite subject ,needless to say,it must be English.

Actually,I resented studing English before because I was poor in English.I clearly remember I was not interested in it,so I did not concentrate in learning it.It goes without saying I must second to everyone in class.

But someday, I made up my mind to learn English well.From then,I studied it day and night.Everyone was so surprised that I finally would like to study it.Now,I am able to get great grades in exams owing to my sowing.

As you sow ,so you reap.I believe if you determind to do something lastly ,you will obtain you want.As a result,do not give up your aim. If you can not achieve your aim today,just push ahead your aim.Perhave you can achieve your aim in the near futere.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    it's too short..

    and there's also a lot of mistakes..

    like the grammar and spellings..

    you need at least 3 hooks, 1 thesis in the first paragraph..

    3 body paragraphs..

    1 conclusion..

    total of five paragraphs for a decent essay..

    talk to me on messanger when you can..

    Source(s): myself..
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