英文寫作 幫我挑錯

以初級的能力來說 我這樣寫okㄇ? Yesterday afternoon. Susan came home by walked. She saw very big cloudy in top of the build, then the cloudy was raining. Susan wasn't taked an umbrella, so she runed faster to home. When she arrived at home,she was feeled bad that has a cold. Her mother was worried... show more 以初級的能力來說 我這樣寫okㄇ?

Yesterday afternoon.

Susan came home by walked.

She saw very big cloudy in top of the build,

then the cloudy was raining.

Susan wasn't taked an umbrella,

so she runed faster to home.

When she arrived at home,she was feeled bad that has a cold.

Her mother was worried about her,then taked Susan to the clinic.

Doctor told her "Taked some medicine and drinked water before

you went to bed,after you will got better soon"


有沒有什麼可以增加寫作技巧的方法呢!?

請告訴我 謝謝各位 ^^
Update: 有什麼學習英文的網站

也可以跟我說嗎?

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