大頭貓 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

想請教各位英文高手如何修改英文自傳

我的英文不是很好...

想請各位英文高手幫我修正我的自傳

檢查看看是否有文法或用字上的錯誤....

以下是我慢慢查字典打的

I was born at a common family. There are five people in my family, and we hit it off well with each other. My father is working in private enterprise, my mother is, too. When I was young my parent taught me with democracy that made me is mine own master.

I like surfing the Internet, listening music and reading on usually. Sometimes I like to have a dinner party and shopping with my friends.

I am conscientious about my work. Between friends or activity of school, I am good at assist someone. Always I invest something that I interest in. Do it finish as soon as I decide to do. My excellence is good-tempered, so I am companionable. I don’t like to hassle someone else that let me come to a fine pass. Even so, I still finish the assignment.

In the future, I wish I can adapt easily to new circumstances, come off well in work, and conduce in our society. About the career planning, I want to get more practical experience. If we don’t try, never to do, that is just desk study. I sure of my ability and the demand of the company will collocate well. Finally, I hope the company will give me a chance; I will do my best to close the mission.

中文

我生長在標準的小家庭當中,經濟狀況尚可,家人間彼此相處也極為融洽。我的家庭共有五成員,家父於私人企業工作,母親服務於私人企業,一家相處融洽。自幼父母則以尊重之方式教育我,讓我在民主的環境下成長,因此造就我獨立的生活態度。平時一個人的時候喜歡上網、聽音樂及看書,偶爾利用假日與三五好友聚餐或逛街。

我為人認真,做事負責、善團隊合作中輔助之角色,這些都要感謝父母對我平日的教導。不論是平常和朋友相處,或是學校的團體活動時,我常扮演著輔助的角色。而我對自己感興趣的工作總是投入,一旦決定參與任何事務,一定會盡力做到底。我覺得自己個性上的優點就是脾氣好,也就是因為這樣的個性使得我包容力很大,並且和其他人相處融洽。缺點是不喜歡麻煩別人,常常使自己陷入苦戰之中,但仍要完成任務。

我期望未來在工作上能適應,也期許自己未來可以在工作領域中有更好的表現,並對社會有所貢獻。至於對未來的生涯規劃方面,目前我最希望的就是獲得更多元化的實務經驗,因為如果沒有實際的去嘗試、真的放手去做,將永遠都只是在紙上談兵。我相信未來我的專才與公司所需要能夠有很好的搭配,最後,希望公司能給我這個機會,我將全力以赴,努力達成公司交待的任務。

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  • Elisa
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago
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    1) Correction: I was brought up in a middle-class family.

    2) Correction: My father works at a private enterprise, and so does my mother.

    3) Correction: When I was young, my parents taught me with respect, providing a democratic environment, which molded my independence.

    4) Correction: In general, I like surfing on the Internet, listening to the music, and reading books. Sometimes, I like to eat with my friends or go shopping with them.

    5) Correction: I take my work seriously. Between friends or school activities, I am good at assisting others. I would always follow through on tasks that I decided to take on.

    6) Correction: I am good-tempered and easy to work with. Sometimes, I have struggled to accomplish the tasks, as I hate to bother other people.

    7) Correction: I wish that I can adapt easily to new environment, perform well at work, and contribute to our society.

    8) Correction: Regarding my future career plan, I want to get more practical experience. It will only be a theory without doing it in person.

    9) Correction: I am sure that my ability will meet your needs, and we will mutually benefit from each other.

    10) Correction: Finally, I hope that your company will give me a chance. I will do my best to accomplish the tasks.

    Source(s): Myself. Studied English abroad at the age of 11. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US for the past 16 years.
  • pearl
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    專業英文履歷與自傳翻譯,

    提供你參考看看(內有面試秘訣):

    http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/jw!w6gPRaOCFQVCeNg8iHiY...

  • 1 decade ago

    I was born at a common family. There are five people in my family, and we hit it off well with each other. My father is working in private enterprise, my mother is, too.

    應改成in a private enterprise, and my mother is, too.

    When I was young my parent taught me with democracy that made me is mine own master.

    應改成 Since I was a child, my parents has taught me in a democratic way, which makes me independent.

    I like surfing the Internet, listening music and reading on usually.

    應改成listening to music and reading in leisure time

    Sometimes I like to have a dinner party and shopping with my friends.

    應改成have dinner or go shopping with my friends

    I am conscientious about my work. Between friends or activity of school, I am good at assist someone.

    整句改掉, 改成Thanks to my parents’ teaching, I am sincere and responsible.

    I often play a helpful role in not only dealing with friends but also taking part in group activities.

    Always I invest something that I interest in. Do it finish as soon as I decide to do.

    改成 I am always engaged in work that interests me. Once deciding, I will do my best.

    My excellence is good-tempered, so I am companionable.

    改成My merit…

    I don’t like to hassle someone else that let me come to a fine pass. Even so, I still finish the assignment.

    改成I seldom bother others. Thus, I often fight alone.

    In the future, I wish I can adapt easily to new circumstances, come off well in work, and conduce in our society.

    改成I hope I can…後面改成contribute to our society

    About the career planning, I want to get more practical experience.

    If we don’t try, never to do, that is just desk study.

    改成If I don’t try, I am just an armchair strategist.

    I sure of my ability and the demand of the company will collocate well.

    改成I am sure my ability will meet the company’s needs well.

    Finally, I hope the company will give me a chance; I will do my best to close the mission.

    close改成achieve

    Source(s): 自己
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