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Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Is this a good poem?

I wrote a poem about baseball. I'm 13. Tell me how you like it.

OPENING DAY

by Garret Craig

SIX months have past; 25 weeks, with the length

Of five long winters! and again I hear

These cheers, filling the stadium

With a spine-tingling rush.--Once again

Do I behold these steep and lofty bleachers,

That on a wildly busy scene impress

Thoughts of more craziness; and connect

The landscape with the quiet of the sky.

The day is come when I again enter this structure.

Here, under the shade of the upper deck,

And view the spectacular greens of the infield.

These bases of white canvas, these perfect squares,

Which in this season, are sacredly unused.

The players all in uniform, sporting the home team crest

Amidst the wood and leather tools of their craft.

Finally I see the pitcher, approaching his glorious mound

The umpire gives the nod and speaks those famous words...

I hold my breath and anxiously wait...

At last--The season has begun.

Update:

lilprincess - How do you determine a poetic subject? That doesn't seem very smart to me.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    Baseball isn't my thing but...it's a pretty nice poem, I really liked it:)

    I'm gonna try to remember your name...Maybe we'll both be successful and meet one day as lecturers or something like that (these weird, funny thoughts are typical of me when i'm euphoric) =P [I'm writing short stories...I'm 14.]

    Best of luck! ;)

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    I saw someone here telling that the subject isn't poetic...I'm not gonna start a childish argument but it sounds like something worthy to say a few words on (thanks lilprincess, it really is a good point:))

    On my behalf, i don't think one should categorize subjects into "poetic" and "non-poetic"...A poem can be on anything if it invokes thoughts and-or feelings inside the poet's soul...

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  • 1 decade ago

    I think you have done a brilliant job, especially as you're only 13, it never ceases to amaze me how young people are that can put pen to paper & write some amazing poems & Story's,

    Well done you obviously have a great imagination & flare & its always nice to share with others..

    Who know's maybe one day you'll be a great writer ? Or maybe your passion is Baseball, What ever you chose in life Im pretty sure you'll do well..

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  • 1 decade ago

    This is well written

    a poem about baseball

    Everything here you described very well

    and pretty well in order.

    It talks about bleachers

    then the deck

    along with the players in uniforms.

    Source(s): I like this poem.
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  • 1 decade ago

    Oh, sigh...I can't wait!

    By the way, your poem's great!

    (Baseball fan for more years than I care to recall.)

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  • 1 decade ago

    wow! im 13 too! thats a real nice poem. i likes it tons! good job.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    well its good but the subject chosen isnt really uhhh.poetic...?

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  • i really like it

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    good job, i like it.

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  • 1 decade ago

    i really like it.

    GOOD JOB! [:

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    YES ITS REALLY GOOD

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