雅琳 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請問這段英文有錯嗎

─Introduction ─

Bartenders Association of Taiwan (B.A.T) was established in July, 1994, by Mr.Chuang, fu hsiung.

To promote our principles and develop business, we joined the International Bartenders Association (I.B.A) in 1995, move our step forward to the whole world and stay in the modern bartending technique.

In March 2000, Mr. Kuo, Chou Kun (Tom) who is a civic-minded person, acceded to the position as president of B.A.T., and had fostered many outstanding bartenders. Mr. Kuo also put much effort on bartending education; from academic interchange, then forward to the food and beverage industry, alcohol distributors to foster professional bartenders; co-operate with universities and high schools, holding events and seminars, to win recognition of the public. Recently, B.A.T established a new branch in Taichung, Taiwan to service for more people. In September 2006, Mrs. Hsieh, Mei Mei acceded to the position as president of B.A.T through the reelection of supervisor s and directors of our association and continuing lead us to another achievement.

以上是我自己參照中文練習寫的。

請問哪裡有問題呀?

Update:

別這樣嘛!!幫幫我練習英文嘛~~各位大佬~~><"

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  • 1 decade ago
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    ─Introduction ─

    Bartenders Association of Taiwan, B.A.T, was established in July, 1994, by Mr.Chuang Fu Hsiung.

    To promote the principles and develop business, it joined the International Bartenders Association (I.B.A) in 1995, moved one step forward to the whole world and the modern bartending technique.

    In March of 2000, Mr. Kuo Chou Kun (Tom), a civic-minded (中文是??)person, (acceded 是不及物動詞,不適用) agreed to take the position as president of B.A.T., and had fostered(怪怪的!!主詞是什麼?) many outstanding bartenders. Mr. Kuo also put many efforts on bartending education: moved forward from academic interchange(是指交換學生或是學術交流??缺少主詞!!) to food and beverage industry, encouraged(鼓勵?) alcohol distributors to foster professional bartenders; (co-operate) worked together with universities and high schools keep holding on events and seminars, to win the acknowledgement from the public. Recently, B.A.T established a new branch in Taichung, (Taiwan to service for)for servicing more Taiwan’s people. In September of 2006, through the re-election from supervisors and directors within the association, Mrs. Hsieh, Mei Mei (acceded to the position as) become the president of B.A.T (through the reelection of supervisor s and directors of our association) and (continuing)keep on leading (us)the B.A.T toword another achievement.

    2008-02-21 23:53:41 補充:

    把括弧中的去掉!! sorry!!我寫在word上而且有反黃但貼回來時全都不見了!!>

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  • 1 decade ago

    Bartenders Association of Taiwan (B.A.T) was established in July, 1994, by Mr. Chuang fu hsiung.

    To promote our principles and DEVELOPMENT OF THE business, we joined the International Bartenders Association (I.B.A) in 1995, WHICH move US ONE step forward to the whole world and stay WITH the modern bartending techniqueS.

    In March 2000, Mr. Kuo Chou Kun (Tom) who is a civic-minded person, ACCEPTED to the position as THE president of B.A.T., and had fostered many outstanding bartenders. Mr. Kuo also put IN MANY effortS IN bartending education; from academic interchange TO THE FOOD AND BEVERAGE INDUSTRY, FROM alcohol distributors to foster professional bartenders; FROM co-operate with universities and high schools, holding events and seminars, to win recognition of the public. Recently, B.A.T established a new branch in Taichung, Taiwan to SERVE more people. In September 2006, Mrs. Hsieh Mei Mei ACCEPTED the position as president of B.A.T through the RE-ELECTION of supervisors and directors of our association and CONTINUE TO lead us to another achievement.

    I used 大寫字母 for the words I changed.

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  • 1 decade ago

    好多要改

    文法!!!!

    可是我沒空幫你用

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