元銘 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請各位先進幫我看一下,我的英文履歷是否有不通順的地方!!!

或是有文法誤用的情形,煩請幫我改正,謝謝各位!!!

(1) basic personal information

My name is xxx. I was born in Tainan, June 19, 1977. I have a young brother in my family and I am the oldest. My parents teach me by democracy and communication way. That leads me to work with sincere, responsible, carefully, good communication and teamwork attitude.

(2) School Associations and extra-curricular activities

I have just graduated from National Pingtung Institute of Commerce last year. For these two years, I studied very hard and my school achievement has very good results in the whole faculty of the top 20 percent. And I pursue the relevant professional skills training in MS software applications and PHP programming language. Aside from, I also conversant to analyze questionnaire by SAS and SPSS statistical software.

My master's thesis use Bi-Gram that combines vector weighting for text categorization, and successful to construction of a more efficient network for community forestry plan search engine, the results of the study are being contributor theses. Even though I had a pretty heavy academic loading during the past two years, I received sufficient training and practice from diversified course and also learned about the basic analysis for planning capabilities and independent thinking for problem-solving abilities. Finally, I also practice interpersonal communication ability by participate in seminars (2006, Chinese Forestry Society Seminar).

(3)Career planning and self-expectations

I have a good-natured personality. Although, in a way, I am not that outgoing, I am very gregarious. I like to live life with a routine rhythm and take on any challenge without cringing. Essentially, I am quite an adaptable man. When I encountered problems, I always optimistic and positive perspective on the predicament. I sincerely hope that your company will give me a chance to offer my skills and abilities for your company’s benefit, as well as mine.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    在修改之前,想請問你,你是要丟到台灣的外商還是在美國的公司?建議你去網上搜尋 resume sample,你會看到很多不錯的範例。

    小小的先幫你修正一些東西,

    (1) General Information

    不要說basic information,不能照字面翻,basic 有一點簡陋的感覺。用General Info就是指你的基本資料。

    (3)Career planning and self-expectations

    I have a good-natured personality. Although, in a way, I am not that outgoing, I am very gregarious.

    千萬任何不利於你的事都不要寫,不需要告訴人家你不outgoing. 你可以不要胡扯,但是不要把弱點寫出來,就不要寫就好。

    儘量用列點式的,不要一大段文章,看的人很累。

    我幫你重新擰一下大綱。

    Name

    General information

    你的名字,地址,聯絡方式

    Summary

    What you are capable of and what you want to achieve in the future job

    短短的寫一下你利害在哪哩,你會替公司帶來怎樣的好處

    Working experience

    1.

    2.

    3.

    Education

    碩士

    大學

    additional training or cetificates

    Skill

    ex. HTML, Englishwriting....

  • 1 decade ago

    這不是履歷表吧!!! 這根本是自傳啊! 你應該需要搞清楚這兩種求職文件的不同。還是建議你去找一家專業職業顧問來幫你吧! 之前朋友介紹我去一家叫做"奧雅國際職業顧問公司",就在捷運忠孝敦化站5號出口處台灣企銀那棟大樓樓上。顧問是ABC,除了把我的中英文履歷表及自傳搞定外,還傳授我一些面試技巧。人超親切的又很耐心,最棒的是諮詢免費喔!去它的網站看看吧 http://www.ozific.com.xn--0ivz02feti/ (02)8773-1610

    英文自傳還是該請外國人翻! 祝你求職順利喽!

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  • 1 decade ago

    Profile + Proficiencies: (我把所有關於你的 都丟在這一段)

    My name is xxx. I was born in Tainan, June 19, 1977. I have a younger brother, and my parents are democratic and we communicate well. I am gregarious, sincere, responsible, and a careful person. I love challenges and problem solving, and always face them with a positive attitude.

    Objective (career planning):

    offering my skills and abilities for your company’s benefit, as well as mine.

    Computer-related Highlight:

    -Microsoft Office

    -PHP programming language

    -SAS and SPSS statistical software.

    Education:

    I graduated from National Pingtung Institute of Commerce last year. During my study …. <<<<for these two years, I studied very hard and my school achievement has very good results in the whole faculty of the top 20 percent (這一段應該可以省略 因為是在蔣你的學校 不是關於你)>>> (以下應該還好 懶的改了) My master's thesis use Bi-Gram that combines vector weighting for text categorization, and successful to construction of a more efficient network for community forestry plan search engine, the results of the study are being contributor theses. Even though I had a pretty heavy academic loading during the past two years, I received sufficient training and practice from diversified course and also learned about the basic analysis for planning capabilities and independent thinking for problem-solving abilities. Finally, I also practice interpersonal communication ability by participate in seminars (2006, Chinese Forestry Society Seminar).

    PS 不好意思 因為我不知道你的 thesis 是關於什麼, 很難改. 還有 那一段關於自己讀書的時候很辛苦可以省略 resume 境量簡潔 最後那一段你自己試試看改吧 希望有幫助!!

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  • 1 decade ago

    (1) basic personal information

    My name is xxx. I was born in Tainan on June 19th in 1977. I have a younger brother in my family and I am the oldest. My parents teach me in a democratic and communicative way. That leads me to work with sincere, responsible, careful, and good attitude for communication and teamwork.

    (2) School Associations and extra-curricular activities

    I just graduated from the Institute of Commerce in National Pingtung University last year. For these two years, I studied very hard and I was in the top 20 percent among the whole faculty. I also pursued the relevant professional skills training in MS software applications and PHP programming language. Aside from those, I was also conversant to analyze questionnaire by SAS and SPSS statistical software. My master's thesis uses Bi-Gram that combines vector weighting for text categorization, and it is successful to construct a more efficient network for community forestry plan search engine. The results of the study are contributor theses (這句看不懂...要解釋什麼?). Even though I had a pretty heavy academic loading during the past two years, I received sufficient training and practices from diversified course and also learned about the basic analysis for planning capabilities and independent thinking for problem-solving abilities. Finally, I also practiced interpersonal communication ability by participating in the seminars (Chinese Forestry Society Seminar, 2006).

    (3)Career planning and self-expectations

    I have a good-natured personality. Although, in a way, I am not outgoing, I am still very gregarious. I like to live life with a routine step and face up to any challenge without cringing. Essentially, I am quite an adaptable man. When I encounter problems, I am always in an optimistic and positive perspective to face the predicament. I sincerely hope that your company will give me a chance to offer my skills and abilities for your company's benefit as well as mine.

    大致上就這樣了...改動的沒有很多,你可以再看看!

    敬祝一切順利囉!

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