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i'm tring to think of a title for this poem?

also what do you think?

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See a body and the dream of the dead days

Following lost and blind

Living, far from here

Tomorrow is hard to find

And it seems like 23 years of

Promises and give me more

Scenes of a hand me down in

Dresses heard before

'Til the end of time

First and last and always... Mine

Maybe it's not so easy

Maybe it's a way too long

Say, say you'll be by me

When the evidence comes along

See a body and the dream of the dead days

A following lost and blind

Cross my heart with silver

Here's the key behind

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  • 1 decade ago
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    How about if you change it to, "See a body and dream of dying days." And you can name it, "Dying Days." That's how I would edit it:

    See a body and dream of dying days

    Follow the lost and blind

    Live near or far away

    Tomorrow is hard to find

    Twenty-three years of empty promises

    Silent screams, "Give me more,"

    Memories of hand-me-downs

    Worn out clothes forevermore

    Maybe it's not that easy

    Maybe it's way too long

    Say, you'll be there for me

    When Evidence comes along

    See a body and dream of dying days

    Follow the lost and blind

    Cross my heart with silver

    And leave your keys behind

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    you repeated that one line "see a body and the dream of the dead days" so obviously it has a lot of importance maybe you should tie the title with that line or even title it "dream of the dead days" the alliteration makes it very nice sounding

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    It's a very good poem.

    hmm i'm more into individuall names that almost have nothing to do with the poem itself. haha so i would say...

    Graveyards and the slient chimes.

    haha idk, probably a no.

    good luck with it though! =]

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