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Everyone has a special memory in life. For me, a special memory was in my childhood.

When I am still a child, I went to my grandparent’s home. One day, we went to the beach, we caught the crabs, picked the shells, played with fish. We played all day at beach and had a lot of fun. Then, we went home to decorate my grandparent’s house with shells; they are still on the wall now. It is also my first time to go to the beach.

However, when I went to that beach last year, there is different from later. There has much garbage and the water is dirty. I am so sad. I hope that I can go back those days.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Everyone has something special in their own life. I have one, too. (You can play joke "It's one, not two. Oh, no, it is many. " to make everybody laugh. ) It was in my childhood.

    I usually liked to visit my grandparent’s house when I was a child. We went to the beach in a day. (What did you see over there? Weather? Temperature? Hot and sweaty? What did you feel? You felt good? why or why not? )

    We caught the crabs, picked the shells, played with fish. (What did you catch? Big or small? How big? Big like "this." What did it look like? Color?) We built sand castles. We swam there. We chased seawave. (Did you surf over there?) We lay down at the beach and had sun bath. We played there (instead of the words "the beach", because you used it just now) all day and had a lot of fun. I got sunburn that day. It was really a wonderful day. I can't forget it. (A lot of things you can write.)

    Then, we went to grandparents's house to decorate it (with shells). They are still on the wall today (better than "now" because usually "now" means "right at this time".) It WAS also my first time to go to the beach.

    *** However, when I went to that beach last year, there is different (You can't use this. You can say either "it is different" or "there are many differences") from later.

    -> It was totally changed at that beach when I went back over there last year.

    *** There has much garbage and the water is dirty.

    Garbage was everywhere.

    There were many garbages and water was dirty. (Don't put "the" before "water". I WAS sad. (Then, it is your turn to talk more about polution and environment protection.)

    I hope that I can go back those days.

  • 1 decade ago

    Everyone has a special memory throughout the life. For me,I have a period of special memory in my childhood. I would cherish it forever because it is hard to have this kind of experience as the world is polluted by people.

    When I was a child, I loved to visit my grandparents' home.I was fond of going to the beach with my grandparents. we caught crabs, picked up the shells, played with fish and enioyed a relaxing da, having a lot of fun. After that, we walked slowly and admired the astonishing sunset on our way home. In the evening, I would always decorated my grandparents' home with different kinds of shells; they are still smiling the wall now. I am so impressed because it was also the first time for me to play on the beach.

    Unfortunately, when I went to that beach last year, The scene there was totally different from the first time I went there. Full of garbage and less of sea animals, the beach was dead. I was disappointed that we humans didn't protect the space where was close to our life. I hoped I could do something for our beautiful world and make it a wonderland.

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    relaxing day

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    on the wall

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    which was close to our life

    Source(s): my brain, my brain, my brain, myself
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