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Anonymous asked in Family & RelationshipsOther - Family & Relationships · 1 decade ago

Please CLICK HERE a cool peom i wrote?

ife Behind These Eyes

Sometimes I wish someone will find me

Beyond these eyes

A long time ago I wished for happiness

I guess life is full of hurt when happiness doesn't work

Never thought I ever felt this way

I try to smile but it shows

You look at me thinking everything is alright but deep inside

I wanna die

Sometimes I wish someone will find me

a tear drop making my eyes burn

Just wishing I can see the truth

behind these eyes

My mind cant forget and heart still burns

I am so cold and alone

Forgive me for I have sin

Sometimes I wish I can find love

Never will happened

Beyond these eyes

Is it good write yes or no i wrote it myself

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  • 1 decade ago
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    its pretty good

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  • 1 decade ago

    It's a good poem, but you should look into using more complex words for added depth, that way the poem'd hit a bit harder.

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  • 1 decade ago

    Cool really good

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    what happend to y or izt because something bad happend in your life

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  • 1 decade ago

    OMG how amazing... love it, you should publish it... simply perfect. A+++++++++++

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    okay,cool.maybe 7 of 10....

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  • 1 decade ago

    Ya!

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  • 1 decade ago

    That was deep....I liked it alot.

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  • 1 decade ago

    yes, that is a lovely poem! :)

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Is really good!!

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