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英文高手請我看一下我的文章

英文高手及好心的你幫我改下好嗎?這是我自己寫的,但不知對不對,老師要求using primarily the simple past tence.但我文法很差不知怎麼寫.

My grandfather was born in Japan Rule period in 1914.

我爺爺上生在1914年,日本統治時代

When he was a baby. His parents were too poor to feed him.

當他一出生,因為他的父母太窮養不起他

Therefore, his parents decided giving his baby to other people.

所以他父母決定把他送給別人撫養

When he was seven years old. He expected could go to school.

當他7歲的時侯,他期待能夠上學

However, only rich family’s children can go to school in that time.

但是,在那個時侯只有有錢人家的小孩才能上學

He just can worked at the farmland all day.

他只能整天待在田裡工作

Sometimes he has to caution form air raid and hide in bomb shelter in an appropriate amount.

有時甚至要注意日本軍的空襲,在適當的時侯躲入防空洞

As he was come of age. He got married by arrange marriage.

到了適婚年齡,他的結婚對像是由父母安排的

He was born nine children.

他一共生了9小個小孩

In Japan Rule period, Taiwanese can not eat rice. Just can eat sweet potato.

在日本時代日本人規定,台灣人不能吃米飯,所以靠著吃地瓜過日子

That why Taiwanese also called sweet potato’s son because many people grown up by sweet potato .

許多人靠著吃地瓜長大,這也就是為什麼台灣人也叫作"番薯仔的兒子原因

At that time my grandfather decided to smuggle rice and salt.

當時我爺爺決定走私一些米和鹽來賺一些錢

Cops often ran after him would like to catch him.

所以當時很多警察追著他跑

But he very strong、powerful and ran very fast.

因為他力量大又強壯而且跑的又快

Therefore, he was very luck cops never catch him.

所以他很幸運的沒有被抓過

In this event our family getting rich.

在這過程中他賺了很多錢,所以家裡變的越來越富有了

He began to build own house and bought a lot of land.

他開始建造屬於自己的房子並買了很多土地

He was richest in his village.

他曾經是村裡最有錢的人

He is 94 years old right now. He still very health.

他現在已經94歲了.身體仍然很健康.

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    My grandfather was born under Japanese rule in 1914 .

    我爺爺出生在1914年,日本統治時代

    When he was a baby, his parents were too poor to raise him.

    當他一出生,因為他的父母太窮養不起他

    ﹡When是連接詞,要有至少兩個句子才可以使用,不可以單單只有一句

    ﹡feed雖是餵養的意思,但對象通常為貓狗這種寵物或動物

    ﹡撫養:raise = bring up = fetch up

    Therefore, his parents decided to give their baby to other people.

    所以他父母決定把他送給別人撫養

    ﹡decide to V

    ﹡孩子是"父母"的,並非只有一個人,所以應該是their而非his

    When he was seven years old, he expected that he could go to school.

    當他7歲的時侯,他期待能夠上學

    ﹡When是連接詞,要有至少兩個句子才可以使用,不可以單單只有一句

    ﹡S expect that S + V

    他期待能去上學,期待後要用完整句,照你的文法是像中式英文

    However, only children born in rich family could go to school at that time.

    但是,在那個時侯只有有錢人家的小孩才能上學

    ﹡時態要一致,過去式就得用過去式的could而非can

    ﹡那時候要用at that time而非in that time

    He could only work at the farmland all day.

    他只能整

    ﹡時態要一致,過去式就得用過去式的could而非can天待在田裡工作

    ﹡助動詞後一律接原型動詞

    2007-11-19 04:23:29 補充:

    Sometimes, he even had to be aware of air raid and hide in bomb shelter in an appropriate time.

    有時甚至要注意日本軍的空襲,在適當的時侯躲入防空洞

    ﹡Sometises為副詞,放句首時需加逗號

    ﹡has應改為過去式的had

    ﹡注意:

    be aware of = be cautious of = be careful = watch out for

    此處應使用動詞,而你所用的caution為名詞,不合文法

    2007-11-19 04:23:39 補充:

    As he was in the age of marriage , his parents arranged a marriage for him.到了適婚年齡,他的結婚對像是由父母安排的

    ﹡As在這也是連接詞,不可以單單只有一個句子出現

    He had nine children.

    他一共生了9小個小孩

    2007-11-19 04:23:50 補充:

    Under the Japanese governement, Taiwanese were not allowed to eat rice, so they only eat sweet potatoes.

    在日本時代日本人規定,台灣人不能吃米飯,所以靠著吃地瓜過日子

    ﹡不可用逗號連接兩個句子,要連接句子必須使用連接詞

    ﹡他們不可能只吃一個番薯,所以potato應使用複數

    2007-11-19 04:23:54 補充:

    Taiwanese were called the sons of sweet potatoes becausue many people lived on sweet potatoes.

    許多人靠著吃地瓜長大,這也就是為什麼台灣人也叫作"番薯仔的兒子原因

    ﹡前面使用That's why後面就無須because的出現

    ﹡live on 以…為食

    2007-11-19 04:24:00 補充:

    At that time , my grandfather decided to smuggle some rice and salt.

    當時我爺爺決定走私一些米和鹽來賺一些錢

    ﹡At that time放句首需加逗號

    2007-11-19 04:24:15 補充:

    Thus, the police often chased him.

    所以當時很多警察追著他跑

    Because he was very strong , powerful and ran very fast ,he was very lucky and never got caught.

    因為他力量大又強壯而且跑的又快 所以他很幸運的沒有被抓過

    ﹡同樣的問題,but也是連接詞,所以不可單單只出現一個句子

    2007-11-19 04:24:22 補充:

    During the process of smuggling, he earned lots of money.

    Therefore, he became more and more wealthy.

    在這過程中他賺了很多錢,所以家裡變的越來越富有了

    ﹡照你的寫法家裡變富有那邊會沒有動詞

    ﹡more and more = increasingly 越來越…

    2007-11-19 04:24:29 補充:

    He began to build his own house and bought a lot of land.

    他開始建造屬於自己的房子並買了很多土地

    He had ever been the richest man in the village.

    曾經是村裡最有錢的人

    ﹡過去完成式可表經驗

    2007-11-19 04:24:36 補充:

    Altoough he is 94 years old now , he is still in good health.

    他現在已經94歲了.身體仍然很健康.

    ﹡加入although連接句子會使得文意更順

    ﹡in good health 健康

    2007-11-19 04:24:51 補充:

    此外:

    我覺得你的文法中式英文偏多,很多不順暢或是翻譯起來會的地方都是受次影響,所以我會建議你多閱讀一些英文雜誌(大家說英語.空中英語教室.常春藤……等等)或是多參考一些範文,多多注意別人的寫作方式以及遣詞用句,這對你絕對有很大的幫助唷^﹏^

    Source(s): 自己, 自己
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  • weiwei
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    My grandfather was born under the Japan Ruling period in 1914.

    我爺爺上生在1914年,日本統治時代

    When he was a baby, His parents were too poor to raise him.

    當他一出生,因為他的父母太窮養不起他

    Therefore, his parents decided to send him to another family.

    所以他父母決定把他送給別人撫養

    When he was seven years old, He looked forward to go to school.

    當他7歲的時侯,他期待能夠上學

    However, only wealthy children could attend school back then.

    但是,在那個時侯只有有錢人家的小孩才能上學

    So he could only work in the paddy fields everyday.

    他只能整天待在田裡工作

    Sometimes he had to be aware of the Japanese air raid and evacuate to the bomb shelter.

    有時甚至要注意日本軍的空襲,在適當的時侯躲入防空洞

    When he arrived at the age to be married, his parent's arranged a marriage for him.

    到了適婚年齡,他的結婚對像是由父母安排的

    They gave birth to 9 children in total.

    他一共生了9小個小孩

    Under the Japanese governement, Taiwanese citizens were not allowed to eat rice. So they survived on sweet potatoes

    在日本時代日本人規定,台灣人不能吃米飯,所以靠著吃地瓜過日子

    The Taiwanese were known as "The sweet potato's son" because of that.許多人靠著吃地瓜長大,這也就是為什麼台灣人也叫作"番薯仔的兒子原因

    At that time my grandfather decided to smuggle some rice and salt.

    當時我爺爺決定走私一些米和鹽來賺一些錢

    Consequently, many cops would chase after him often.

    所以當時很多警察追著他跑

    But he very strong and powerful and ran very fast.

    因為他力量大又強壯而且跑的又快

    Therefore, he never got caught.

    所以他很幸運的沒有被抓過

    During this process of smuggling, he earned a lot of money. So he become wealthy.

    在這過程中他賺了很多錢,所以家裡變的越來越富有了

    He then decided to build his own estate and bought a lot of land.

    他開始建造屬於自己的房子並買了很多土地

    He was once the most wealthy person in his village.

    他曾經是村裡最有錢的人

    Although He is now 94 years of age, he is still very healthy and lively.

    他現在已經94歲了.身體仍然很健康.

    Source(s): me
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  • Harris
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    My grandfather was born under Japanese rule in 1914 .

    我爺爺上生在1914年,日本統治時代

    When he was a baby. His parents were too poor to raise him.

    當他一出生,因為他的父母太窮養不起他

    Therefore, his parents decided giving him to other people.

    所以他父母決定把他送給別人撫養

    When he was seven years old, he wanted to go to school.

    當他7歲的時侯,他期待能夠上學

    However, only children of rich family's children could go to school in that time.

    但是,在那個時侯只有有錢人家的小孩才能上學

    He just could only work at the farmland all day.

    他只能整天待在田裡工作

    Sometimes he had to watch out for air raid and hid in bomb shelter.

    有時甚至要注意日本軍的空襲,在適當的時侯躲入防空洞

    As he was coming of age. He got married by parental arrangement.

    到了適婚年齡,他的結婚對像是由父母安排的

    He had nine children.

    他一共生了9小個小孩

    In Japan Rule period, Taiwanese could not eat rice, they could only eat sweet potato.

    在日本時代日本人規定,台灣人不能吃米飯,所以靠著吃地瓜過日子

    That's why Taiwanese were called sweet potato’s sons because many people grew up by sweet potato .

    許多人靠著吃地瓜長大,這也就是為什麼台灣人也叫作"番薯仔的兒子原因

    At that time my grandfather decided to smuggle rice and salt.

    當時我爺爺決定走私一些米和鹽來賺一些錢

    The police often ran after him.

    所以當時很多警察追著他跑

    But he was very strong、powerful and ran very fast.

    因為他力量大又強壯而且跑的又快

    Therefore, he was very luck and never got caught.

    所以他很幸運的沒有被抓過

    In this event our family was getting rich.

    在這過程中他賺了很多錢,所以家裡變的越來越富有了

    He began to build his own house and bought a lot of land.

    他開始建造屬於自己的房子並買了很多土地

    He was the richest in his village.

    他曾經是村裡最有錢的人

    He is 94 years old right now. He is still very healthy.

    他現在已經94歲了.身體仍然很健康.

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