陳嘉瑢 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請各位英文達人幫我檢查英文文法對不對?

請幫我修改以下這篇文章的文法

Good afternoon everybody

My name is XXX. I was born in Kaohsiung. I was born on February 13, 1986. My family has five members, including my father, mother, elder brother, elder sister and myself. I'm a lively and easygoing person. Especially I am good at communication with people.

To begin with, I like computer, accounting and English in my college life. Especially I am good at accounting which is my best favorite subject. Beside, in my free time, I enjoy listening to PoP music and R&B music. Sometimes, I also enjoy watching some talk show, Discovery, soap opera and Japanese Drama on TV. Because above recreations help me to relieve my pressure from everyday.

Moreover, in aspect of sport, I enjoy playing table tennis, badminton and bowling. As for my hobby, I enjoy window shopping, singing and riding bicycle.

My goal in life is to be a public servant (civil servant)哪一個公務人員的用法叫好. Because government job provides good pay and conditions for the employees in their life.

For this plan, the first thing I would like to do is to find a job that is an administration assistant in the daytime after I graduated from college. At night time, I will go to study in the cram school about the subjects for the examination of government job.

My dream is to travel around the world on my own in my future. First, I want to play in amusement parks around the world. Then, I want to taste various kinds of delicious food in the world. Moreover, I want to visit all marvelous sights in the world. Anyway, I hope my goal and my dream will come true in the future.

Thank you for listening to my self-introduction patiently.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Good afternoon, everybody

    (段落要空六格)

    My name is XXX. I was born on February 13, 1986 in Kaohsiung. My family has five members, including my father, mother, elder brother, elder sister and me. I'm a lively and easygoing person. Especially I am good at communicating with people.

    To begin with, I like computer. Accounting and English is my favorite subject. (accounting and English in my college life原本的句子根本看不懂) Especially I am good at Accounting which is my best favorite subject.

    Moreover, on the aspect of sport, I enjoy playing table tennis, badminton, and bowling. As for my hobby, I enjoy go window shopping, singing and riding bicycle. In my free time, I enjoy listening to Pop music and R&B music. Sometimes I also enjoy watching TV program like some talk show, Discovery, soap opera, and Japanese Drama because above recreations can help me to relieve my pressure. (because S+V, S+V 要有兩個子句)>>興趣和運動弄同一段較好

    My goal in life is to be an official. Because of job of government provides good salary and benefit for the employees in their life. In order to do this plan, the first thing that I would like to find a job that is an assistant in administration in the daytime after I graduated from the college. At nighttime, I will go to cram school. Study about the subjects for the examination of job of government.

    My dream is to travel around the world on my own in my future. First, I want to go to amusement parks in the world. Second, I want to taste various kinds of delicious food in the world. Third, I want to visit all marvelous sights in the world. As a result, I hope my goal and my dream will come true in the future.

    Thank you for listening to my introduction patiently.

    Source(s): 自己
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    1 decade ago

    Good afternoon everybody.

    My name is XXX. I was born in Kaohsiung on February 13, 1986. There are five people in my family, including my father, mother, elder brother, elder sister and myself. I'm a lively and easygoing person. Personally, I am good at communication with people.

    To begin with, I like computer, accounting and English lessons in my college life. Especially, I am good at accounting which is my favorite subject. Beside, in my free time, I enjoy listening to PoP music and R&B music. Sometimes, I also enjoy watching some talk shows, Discovery, soap operas and Japanese Dramas on TV, because these recreations help me relieve my pressure everyday.

    Moreover, in aspect of sport, I enjoy playing table tennis, badminton and bowling. As for my hobby, I enjoy window shopping, singing and riding bicycle.

    My goal in life is to be a public servant (civil servant)哪一個公務人員的用法叫好. Because government job provides good pay and conditions for the employees in their life.

    For this plan, the first thing I would like to do is to find a job that is an administration assistant in the daytime after I graduated from college. At night time, I will go to study in the cram school about the subjects for the examination of government job.

    My dream is to travel around the world on my own in my future. First, I want to play in amusement parks around the world. Then, I want to taste various kinds of delicious food in the world. Moreover, I want to visit all marvelous sights in the world. Anyway, I hope my goal and my dream will come true in the future.

    Thank you for listening to my self-introduction patiently.

    Source(s): myself
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