琦琦 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

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The storm continued, as I proceeded to make my web. I bore the strong wind blowing over me and the hard rain hitting me. I fell and fainted when my web broke.

When I awoke, the storm is still going on. With the instincts of an animal, I realized that it was already in the late afternoon. I became absolutely starving after finding out that. I was weak, but I still have to work.

I started to make my web again. First, I fixed a few threads which wasn’t sticky, so that I can climb on them to make my job easier, otherwise I may be stuck on the web! Even though it is not a very difficult task, but it takes me at least five to six times to finish it.

“Thanks to the wind and the rain!” I thought sarcastically.

I didn’t have enough energy, but I persisted to finish my work before resting. So, here comes the second step, which is the most complicated one: connecting the threads with the sticky ones.

After more than an hour repeating the action of falling down and climbing up while the web also broke down, I finally finished my web. Now I’ll just have to wait and see.

However, things aren’t working so smooth. The wind is not satisfied with my work as she flew through it, breaking it down — again. So I have to start it again. This procedure was repeated for no less than ten times, nevertheless, I can’t quit.

Finally, “how a man sows, so he will reap”, I saw a butterfly flying towards here when I was finishing my web. However, it flew through my web! Then I realized: I had so little energy that I was reaching death.

A bird was flying over my head, it dived and caught me. I just knew that.

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  • 高み
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago
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    As the storm continued, I kept spinning my web. I had my body blown over and punched by rain. I came tumbling down and passed out as my web was torn down.

    When I awoke, the storm is still going on. With the instincts of an animal, I realized that it was already in the late afternoon. I became absolutely starving after finding out that. I was weak, but I still have to work.

    I do it again. First, I fixed a few threads which wasn’t sticky, so that I can climb on them to make my job easier, otherwise I may be stuck on the web! Even though it is not so hard, it still takes me more than five times to fix it.

    “Thanks to the wind and the rain!” I thought sarcastically.

    I'm powerless, while I'm struggling to get my work done before I call it a day . So, I kept moving to the most complicated one, to get those threads bound together.

    After more than an hour repeating the action of falling down and climbing up while the web also broke down, I finally finished my web. Now I just see what will happen.

    However, things aren’t going well. The wind didn't take my work as she broke into it. She ripped it open again. So I have to start it from zero. I just got to do it over and over again even up to ten times. Nevertheless, I won't quit.

    Finally, “ a man sows what he reaps”, I saw a butterfly come in when spinning my web. However, I just let him go! Then it dawned on me that I'm going to die.

    A bird flying overhead swooped down to snatch me away. I just knew that.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    no.1 回答的不比你原本的好. 你用了很多present tense. 你的應該都是要用 past tense.

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