琦琦 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請幫我改文章~20點唷~ 不一定全段~ 一點點也可唷!

有一篇英文文章

麻煩大家改一下喔~

錯的請特別標示

然後跟我講位啥錯唷~^^

3Q~

Be the thing — A Spider in the storm

“I am a happy little spider ‘cause I work so hard. I enjoy my work which gets me some prey. I’m convinced with my skills and energy! That’s why I love my job!...”

It was a sunny morning, so, with a great mood, I sang while I was making a web between two gigantic trees full of green leaves and thick branches, which is a corner full of sunlight.

However, when it’s noon, after hours of peace and calmness, it suddenly started to rain — raining cats and dogs! I was shocked. Then, I saw my web being destroyed by the inexorable sisters – the wind and the rain.

“How can you two be so ruthless? That web, is made with my own hands, with hard work and sweat, for me to get food and to preserve my life. How dare you!” I said with anger. “You cannot blame us, we have no choice. We have to do what the gods tell us to,” said the wind. The rain continued, “We must obey them, otherwise we’ll get punishments.” They answered, as they left, with no alternative.

I did not have the opportunity to say any other words. My only option is to keep working, I have spent too much energy this morning. I became hungry.

後面還有一些

再另一個問題裡喔~

麻煩有興趣者去看一下

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Update:

屙...

舞羽風流大哥:

你看錯了!

我是說改文章.....

但還是很感謝特地幫我翻啦..!=ˇ="

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  • 高み
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    1 decade ago
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    Be the thing — A Spider in the storm

    “I am a happy little spider ‘cause I work so hard. I enjoy my work which gets me some prey. I’m well convinced of my skills and energy! That’s why I love my job!...”

    A sunny morning, with a great mood, I sang while spinning a web between two huge and lush trees. It's indeed a cozy corner I want.

    However, everything good turned to nothing at all. The peace and tranquility lasted only a couple of hours. After a sudden downpour (it rains dogs and cats) wreaked havoc, I sat appalled. Then, I had my web destroyed by the inexorable sisters – the wind and the rain.

    “How can you do to me like that? That web on which I live is made up with my own blood and sweat,. How dare you!” I rebuked. “It's not our fault, we have no choice for the gods' sake,” said the wind. The rain continued, “We must obey them, otherwise we’ll get punished.” They answered, as they left with no alternative.

    I did not have any chance to put a word. All I can do is keep working. Spinning has taken it out of me this morning.So far I'm getting hungry.

    2007-09-26 23:10:18 補充:

    Basically, your English is good. However, I supposed something you need to take for a good ENGLISH. Thus, I made a bit changes that'll help you hone your skill to write.

    basically

  • 1 decade ago

    標題:***--一隻在暴風雨中的蜘蛛

    第一段:我是一隻快樂的小蜘蛛,因為我工作的很認真(努力)。

    我喜歡我這份能得到一些獵物的工作。我深信著我的技巧與精力。那就是為什麼我喜歡我的這份工作。

    第二段:那(這)是一個陽光普照的早上,因此我有著好心情。我在位於兩棵長滿綠葉及繁茂樹枝的巨樹之間充滿陽光的角落中,編織著我的(蜘蛛)網。

    第三段:然而,在平靜太平的正午幾個小時後,天空(天氣)突然開始下雨-傾盆大雨。我被嚇到了。然後我看到我的(蜘蛛)網被無情的姐妹(?)-狂風及暴雨給摧毀。

    第四段:“你們怎麼可以如此的無情呢?那個網,是我用我的全部辛苦的工作及流汗所製成的,是為了給我食物及保存生命的。你們怎麼敢這麼做?”我生氣地說道“你不可以責備我們,我們別無選擇。我們必須做這老天告訴我們的。”風這麼說。雨繼續說道“我們必須服從祂,否則我們會被懲罰。”他們回應著,他們走時,同樣沒有替代方法(?)。

    第五段:我沒有機會去說任何字句。我唯一的選擇是繼續工作,在今天早上我花了太多精力,我變的很餓。

    我是就我的英文知識幫你翻譯的,有些地方不太通順,你記的要修改一下。

    Source(s): 我自己^ ^
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