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In 1841, Hong Kong was taken over by the United Kingdom. The reason why the U.K. took over was mainly because of trade. " European demand for tea and silk grew, the balance of trade became more and more unfavourable to Europeans, who were expected to pay in silver." (http://www.lonelyplanet.com/worldguide/destination... which would lead to the opium war. It has been about 166 years after the takeover and H.K. has been given back to china in 1997.

The education system has been remodeled slightly after the turnover. There were debates on if hong kong schools should change the foreign language requirement from english to mandirin chinese. Also, if they should take away english language school and ask them to switch it to their mother tounge, cantonese. However, there is much controversy toward this because many parents woud rather have their children to be taught in english. "Some parents opposed to move to cantonese believing their children will fare better later in life if the graduate from english language schools. ' My mother and father always force me to speak english.' said Maxine Li, 18, a highschool senior, speaking in cantonese. ' They think english is more important'( washington post...). Other problems that was encountered is the problem of overcrowding in schools. " There are now 932,165 students in Hong Kong. But just across the border in southern China are an estimated 130,000 children born to Hong Kong fathers-- all of whom have right to move here and enter local schools after July 1" (washington post...). Those are the problems the education system of Hong Kong was facing.

America was worried how they would get affected after July 1st. Hong Kong is big business for many U.S. companies such as banks, insurance companies, bokerage houses, agricultural industry, and advertising firms. More than 11,000 american companies were in Hong Kong 10 years ago, who knows how much more has been built there since then. " The Commerce Department that total U.S. investment in Hong Kong is 13.8 billion. This is America's 13th largest trading partner(1997), and for 1995 the United States had a $3.9 billion surplus in that trade" (washington post link...). Where else in the world could people make hundreds and hundreds in millions of dollars off of chicken feet that the U.S. probably would have thrown away? Having a major company such as the agricultural industry be placed there is also very strategic. Since Hong Kong is a trading port, Much of the shipment has a high probability of being reexported to other regions such as mainland china. Other reasons why Hong Kong is important to the U.S. are the law enforcement agencies, such as the FBI and the Drung Enforcement Administration. It is because of the "increasing links between asian organized crime in America and the local triads"( washington post....). Helping the U.S. solve more and more cases like drug trafficking or counterfitting.

conclusion: A few things has been revised since then. Such as the disapearence of Queen Elizabeth II in bank notes and postage stamps, holidays, and the "Royal" title being dropped out of almost every organization like the Royal Police Force. None of the changes in Hong Kong were major. They still regard flights to the mainland international, The border between China is still being patrolled, More freedom(including freedom of the press), and so on...Hong Kong is still considered one of the most important cities in the world.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    In 1842, the Treaty of Nanking ceded Hong Kong to Great Britain. The year before the start of the opium wars, Britain had used the island of Hong Kong as a naval base. Leading to the opium wars was the European demand for tea and silk grew, which caused the balance of trade became more and more unfavorable to Europeans, who were expected to pay in silver. In 1997, after 165 years of being ruled by the British, China took control of Hong Kong.

    The education system was slightly remodeled after the turnover. There were debates on whether or not Hong Kong schools should change the requirement for English to Mandarin Chinese. It was discussed whether English language schools should be switched to Cantonese. However, there was much opposition to this by the parents of the students. Some parents were opposed to change to Cantonese believing their children would fare better in life if they graduated from English language schools. “My mother and father always force me to speak English’ said Maxine Li, 18, a high school senior, speaking in Cantonese. “They think English is more important“ (Washington Post). Other problems that were encountered was the problem of overcrowding in schools. "There are now 932,165 students in Hong Kong. But just across the border in southern China are an estimated 130,000 children born to Hong Kong fathers-- all of whom have right to move here and enter local schools after July 1" (Washington Post). Those were the problems the education system in Hong Kong was facing.

    America was concerned about how they would get affected after July 1st takeover by China. Hong Kong is big business for many American companies including banks, insurance companies, brokerage houses, agricultural industries, and advertising firms. The last public census count of American companies in Hong Kong numbered over 11,000, and that is 10 years out of date. “The Commerce Department that totals U.S. investments in Hong Kong has placed it at 13.8 billion. This is America's 13th largest trading partner (1997), and for 1995 the United States had a $3.9 billion surplus in that trade" (Washington Post). Where else in the world could people make hundreds and hundreds in millions of dollars off of chicken feet that the U.S. probably would have thrown away? It was a shrewd strategic move to place agricultural industries in Hong Kong, since Hong Kong is a gateway trading port, to a very large consumer - China. Another reason why Hong Kong is important to the U.S. is for law enforcement agencies such as the FBI and the Drug Enforcement Administration. This is because Hong Kong is "increasing links between Asian organized crime in America and the local triads" (Washington Post), dealing in drugs and counterfeiting.

    Since China has taken over the reins from the British for the control of Hong Kong, there have been some noticeable changes. There are no longer Queen Elizabeth II bank notes. Postage stamps and holidays relating to Queen Elizabeth II have been eliminated. The world “Royal", has been dropped of from organizations like the Royal Police Force. However, none of the changes in Hong Kong have been major. The border between China and Hong Kong is still militarily patrolled. But the bottom line is that no matter who rules Hong Kong, it is still considered one of the most important cities in the world. “Starting out as a fishing village, salt production site and trading ground, it would evolve into a military port of strategic importance and eventually an international that enjoys the world's 14th highest GDP (Gross Domestic Product), supporting 33% of the foreign capital flows into China.”(Wikipedia)

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    I think you need to have an English teacher help you revise this.

    *There are many grammatical and spelling errors.

    *The sentence structure and paragraph topics are not clear or well organized.

    *You need to have a clear introduction, body and conclusion.

    *Remember, a conclusion should not present any new ideas or statistics. This is meant for the body of the paper which supports the paragraph's topic. A conclusion should just summarize what you have already said.

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