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The person who has had the biggest influence in my life is Carol .Because not was only he/she taught me English but also much about poems. I have been close to her ever since I was 15 years old and we were very close. I feel a debt of gratitude to teach me for always being there for me through the difficult time.

Carol has always been my role model. I have long admired his/her success in English, Art, gardening , and the way he/she taught me .My goal in life is to be just like him/her, to get the most I can out of life. Because of Carol’s strong influence, I find her personality was fascinating. I am always impressed that he/she started became a successful teacher at my age and to rose to be the most respecting teacher of mine in just a few years. She has supported my interest in gardening, and was very proud of me when I have my own flower shop.

I also admire Carol’s devotion to education. This was helpful and quickly became an English professor. This endeavor took up his/her life for twenty years until he/she retire in her career. Since then, she has been in part because of Carol’s efforts.

Carol’s accomplishments have meant strong influence to me. She has been just like my mother in my life, showing me that knowledge is endless and powerful. I hope to inherit his/her virtues and knowledge in order to make him/her proud.

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    The person who has had the biggest influence in my life is Carol .

    Because "she/he not only" taught me English but also much about poem. I have been "known "her ever since I was 15 years old and we were

    very close. I "have a lot of" gratitude to "her that she/he always helps me when I have difficulities".

    Carol has always "played an important role in my life".

    I have long admired his/her success in English, Art, gardening , and the way he/she taught me .My goal in life is to be just like him/her,

    to get the most I can out of life. Because of Carol’s strong influence, I find her personality was fascinating. I am always impressed that

    he/she started became a successful teacher at my age and to rose to

    be the most respecting teacher of mine in just a few years. She has

    supported my interest in gardening, and was very proud of me when I have my own flower shop.

    I also admire Carol’s devotion to education. This was helpful and quickly became an English professor. This endeavor took up his/her life for twenty years until he/she retire in her career. Since then, she has been in part because of Carol’s efforts.

    Carol’s accomplishments have meant strong influence to me. She has been just like my mother in my life, showing me that knowledge is endless and powerful. I hope to inherit his/her virtues and knowledge in order to make him/her proud.

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    2007-05-16 21:53:28 補充:

    Have meant strong influence "on"me

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  • 1 decade ago

    第一行:把had刪掉 因為注動詞和助動詞不能夠擺在一起。

    我只檢查出這個ㄟ!~

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