Feedback on poem please?

Drink Till It's Gone

by: Poetically Incorrect

Being paralyzed to the pain is better than dealing with it

Drink your sorrows away baby girl

As soon as the liquor hits you're tongue, you love the taste of it

You drink until you can't feel anymore

He forced himself on you, and now you can't live anymore

5 bottles later you don't know whether you're coming or going

All you know is that the tears keep flowing

being drunk is better than facing reality

The Truth of the matter is you're pregnant

Afraid of what to do, you keep drinking to kill it

Why do you fear it?

drunken teenage mother, caught up in the world all alone

the guy who raped you was twice your age, he was grown

baby girl keep strong

you were never in the wrong

dry your tears

and stop drinking away all your fears

* One of my shorter ones, but still meaningful..Feedback appreciated

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Baby girl keep strong.

    In God's Hands you belong.

    Drinking doesn't take away the pain.

    Personal experience tells me the same.

  • 1 decade ago

    I don't know. I guess it's real enough, but who is the voice speaking this poem? And what relationship do they have to the victim in the poem? Seems kind of patronizing to me.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    sad but true for so many young ladies.

  • I like it. It's real and relevant.

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