潤發 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請高手幫我訂正我的菜英文!!

這是一篇要描述王建民的文章,寫的很爛,請各路好手幫忙一下,謝謝!題目是:The hero of Taiwan in the America

He is a first pitcher entered the MLB (Major League Baseball), fastball forkball and sinker were secret weapon of him. He made so many records in Taiwan and Asia even the America, he is Chine-Ming Wang.

Wang was born in Taiwan country, when he was a child he didn’t like study so he joined baseball team, he was very tall but weakly in that time nobody knows he will became a superstar in the future.

Until he was playing in class a of team, there was one day he made a new record of baseball speed which was 151km he was not catch the detective attention but also foreign baseball team.

He has a part of different with other pitcher; he is very humble, I hope he could keep doing on his work show to everyone on the world how good are Taiwanese.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    He was the first pitcher entered the MLB (Major League Baseball).

    Fastball, forkball and sinker were his secret weapons.

    He's made so many records in Taiwan, Asia and even in America.

    He is Chine-Ming Wang.

    Wang was born in Taiwan country.

    When he was a child, he didn’t like to study so he joined baseball team.

    He was very tall but weakly at that time.

    Nobody knows he would become a superstar in the future.

    Until he was playing in class a of team, there was one day he made a new record of baseball speed which was 151km he not only caught the detective attention but also foreign baseball team's.

    He has a part of difference from other pitcher; he is very humble, I hope he could keep doing on his work and show everyone in the world how good Taiwanese are.

    寫的不錯,但注意英文每句,只能有一個動詞。

    有不懂的地方在問,我會回來幫你解答。

    Source(s): 10年補教經驗。
  • 1 decade ago

    我的天!最佳解答光第一句就有兩個動詞這麼明顯的錯誤,其他句還有呢!

    補教界10年,嘖嘖......

    工藤新一的答案真的比較好,至少正確率高多了。

  • 1 decade ago

    He s a pitcher in the MLB (為什麼要強調first呢 他不是第一個進MLB的台灣人阿) Fastballs and sinkers are his secret weapons.(他並不會投forkball) He made a lot of records in Taiwan, in Asia, and even in America. He is Chien-Ming Wang.

    Wang was born in Taiwan. He joined the baseball team as a child because he didn't like studying. He was very tall but not especially talented (你應該是想說他沒有很出色吧) Nobody knew he will become a superstar in the future.(注意時態)

    Until he was playing on a team, he threw a record speed of 151 km, and caught the attention of Major League teams.

    He is different from a lot of pitcher because he is very humble. I hope he can keep playing well and show the world that Taiwanese are good at baseball.

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