My poem. I need constructive criticism. Please read & comment?
I have been considering publishing, though I am only 14. Perhaps when I am older? Please read my other poems in my recent questions section. Constructive criticism, please.
I have been facing a brick wall of lies for days now
Without a single person wondering of my motives
Nor without any questions of turning back to the real world
This is the punishment that I have chosen for my sins
And I will serve it without a single word of complaint
Maybe someone will notice me standing here alone
Or someone would care to look up for a change instead of down
This is a crime that I comitted so willingly, so freely
Is that of the upmost severity and is looked down upon
The horrible deed that I did was allow you to steal my heart
I allowed you to guide me past the darkness, towards the light
But when all was revealed to everyone, you fled in terror
Without a word of apology or vague explanation
And I was trialed an unfair trial and sentenced to
A life of solitude, a life of silence, and life of songless breathing
So I stand here alone, shunned by the world of good and
I am not a welcomed resident of the pits of Hell
Not a holy, sinless person, walking through the gates of Heaven
And now I dwell in the forest of evil that even now, is lost eternally
So now, I just sit here and wait for a final resolution
I just stand here and stare as everyone passes by me
Forever wondering why you left me when I needed you most.