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Title: Leaving Me To Face The Lies I have been considering publishing, though I am only 14. Perhaps when I am older? Please read my other poems in my recent questions section. Constructive criticism, please. I have been facing a brick wall of lies for days now Without a single person wondering of my... show more Title: Leaving Me To Face The Lies
I have been considering publishing, though I am only 14. Perhaps when I am older? Please read my other poems in my recent questions section. Constructive criticism, please.

I have been facing a brick wall of lies for days now

Without a single person wondering of my motives

Nor without any questions of turning back to the real world

This is the punishment that I have chosen for my sins

And I will serve it without a single word of complaint

Maybe someone will notice me standing here alone

Or someone would care to look up for a change instead of down

This is a crime that I comitted so willingly, so freely

Is that of the upmost severity and is looked down upon

The horrible deed that I did was allow you to steal my heart

I allowed you to guide me past the darkness, towards the light

But when all was revealed to everyone, you fled in terror

Without a word of apology or vague explanation
Update: You left me alone to their cruel eyes, the tyrant's stare And I was trialed an unfair trial and sentenced to A life of solitude, a life of silence, and life of songless breathing So I stand here alone, shunned by the world of good and I am not a welcomed resident of the pits of Hell Not a holy,... show more You left me alone to their cruel eyes, the tyrant's stare

And I was trialed an unfair trial and sentenced to

A life of solitude, a life of silence, and life of songless breathing

So I stand here alone, shunned by the world of good and

I am not a welcomed resident of the pits of Hell

Not a holy, sinless person, walking through the gates of Heaven

And now I dwell in the forest of evil that even now, is lost eternally

So now, I just sit here and wait for a final resolution

I just stand here and stare as everyone passes by me

Forever wondering why you left me when I needed you most.
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