Please review my poem! Constructive criticism is needed! It's needed for a school project on Bitterness.?
You expect me to be the best,
To be above all the rest,
But I've got to say,
It put's more pressure on me everyday.
I try to ace every test,
But some things I just can't retain.
When I fail and you say,
"You did your best. It's okay."
It makes me fel like I'm letting you down,
And that inside your smile is really a frown.
I hate to disappoint you,
So I give up some things I'd like to do,
To stay home and study up,
Because deep down I know why you pressure me.
You want me to have a better life than you had,
To never have to need something I just can't have,
So I'll go to school,
And try to be the best I can be,
It used to make me angry,
That you wanted so much from me,
But now I see,
You only want me to be happy.
The last lines seem increibly weak so help is deperatley needed! Also do you think it would fall under the bitterness category?