Please review my poem! Constructive criticism is needed! It's needed for a school project on Bitterness.?

Expectations You expect me to be the best, To be above all the rest, But I've got to say, It put's more pressure on me everyday. I try to ace every test, But some things I just can't retain. When I fail and you say, "You did your best. It's okay." It makes me fel like I'm... show more Expectations
You expect me to be the best,
To be above all the rest,
But I've got to say,
It put's more pressure on me everyday.
I try to ace every test,
But some things I just can't retain.
When I fail and you say,
"You did your best. It's okay."
It makes me fel like I'm letting you down,
And that inside your smile is really a frown.
I hate to disappoint you,
So I give up some things I'd like to do,
To stay home and study up,
Because deep down I know why you pressure me.
You want me to have a better life than you had,
To never have to need something I just can't have,
So I'll go to school,
And try to be the best I can be,
Because Mom,
It used to make me angry,
That you wanted so much from me,
But now I see,
You only want me to be happy.


The last lines seem increibly weak so help is deperatley needed! Also do you think it would fall under the bitterness category?
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