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24 th January, 2007

Dear Young Li Wei,

How are you? I am fine. As you succeeded in going up to the space in October 2003, I want send a letter to you now.

First, my name is Ben, I am ten years old. I am in 5B. How old are you? What is your Primary School?

You are the first Chinese person in space, you are happy?

Please reply soon.

Fence

Ben

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    24th January, 2007

    Dear Mr. Young,

    How are you? My name is Ben and I am a Primary 5 student *(in Hong Kong).

    I was excited about your successful in travelling in the space in October 2003 that I am going to send you a letter.

    I am a ten-year-old boy. Would you mind telling me how old you are? Can you tell me which primary school did you come from?

    Moreover, as you are the first Chinese who travelled in the space, how do you feel about it?

    Please reply soon.

    Yours Sincerely,

    Ben

    ____________________________*(in Hong Kong)可省略__________________________

    我幫你改o左啦~

    咁呢, 其實你寫果篇文都冇乜問題

    只係有幾點你要注意一下:

    1) 因為你同楊利偉唔熟, 而佢又唔識你, 所以要有禮貌, 通常都唔會用dear young li wei而係用dear mr young, 同時, 你同佢唔熟, 但因你知佢個名, 所以禮貌上就要用yours sincerely, yours faithfully係用o係你唔知收信者係邊個ge時候

    2)want to+bare inf (照抄個verb), 即want to do something 而唔係want do something to somebody

    3)問題應該用are you happy而唔係you are happy(呢個唔係一個問題)

    o係我果篇度你會見到would you mind telling how old you are?呢句文化格式上係正確ge~

    因為前面已經係問題(would you mind telling), 所以後面個noun 要跟番verb要(how old you are)

    基本上就係咁多,希望可以幫到你~

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  • 1 decade ago

    Dear Young Li Wei,

    How are you? I am fine. As you succeeded in going up to the space in October 2003, I want to send a letter to you.

    My name is Ben, I am ten. I am in class 5B. How old are you? What Primary School are you study in?

    You are the first Chinese in space, are you happy?

    Please reply soon.

    Yours,

    Ben

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    24 th January, 2007

    Dear Young Li Wei,

    How are you? As you succeeded in going up to the space in October 2003, I want to send a letter to you now.

    My name is Ben and I am ten years old. I am studing in primary five . How old are you? What is your Primary School?

    You are the first Chinese who go up to thespace, are you happy about that?

    I am looking forword to hear from you.

    Fence

    Ben

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  • 1 decade ago

    January 24th, 2007

    Dear Mr. Young,

    How are you?

    I am writing to introduce myself to you.I still admire that you went to the space by aircraft for testing in October, 2003, which made me pretty happy.

    My name is Ben, 10, I'm studying in primary school on 5B. I have question to ask, how old are you? What's your primary school? I think it may be the excellent school that make you a astronaut.I would like to make friend with you.Hope to reply.

    Yours faithfully.

    Ben.

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    24 th January, 2007

    Dear Young Li Wei,

    How are you? As you succeeded in going up to the space in October 2003, I want to send you a letter.

    My name is Ben, I am ten years old. I am studying in primary five. How old are you? What is your primary school?

    You are the first Chinese person in space. Are you happy about that?

    Please reply me as soon as possible.

    Love,

    Ben

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