What do you think of this song i wrote? honest answers plz!!?

I see you everyday, wish i could tell you (wish i could tell you) how i feel for you when i first saw you (when i first saw you) my heart flew and CHORUS i have always loved you more than you ever knew now i need you more than you realize.....that i do i cannot go on livin without you anymore now... show more I see you everyday, wish i could tell you (wish i could tell you)
how i feel for you
when i first saw you (when i first saw you)
my heart flew
and
CHORUS

i have always loved you
more than you ever knew
now i need you
more than you realize.....that i do
i cannot go on livin without you anymore

now your with him (now your with him)
you look so happy
so tell me are you happy?! (are you happy!?)
cause its killing me seeing you with him
cause
repeat chorus

now your getting married
and i realize that your love for him is true
and now i am feeling blue
cause you love him but i love you

repeat chorus ? maybe

if your reading this
i must be gone
but don't be sad
he will make you happy
but just remember that i always loved you

saw you everyday
glad i finally told you how i feel
for you.

i wrote this song with 1 of my friends, and it is intended to be sung by an alternative rock band, i would like to know your thoughts of it.
do you like it? if not what is wrong? don't lie be honest
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