宥均 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

誰可以幫我檢查英文自我介紹 急

My english nema is cookie, chinese name is Gin,yu gun,there are six people in my family,my father is a civil service and mother is a house wife,i have three younger sisters。

I am going to talk about my personality,i am lively and cheeriness,i like shopping and singing,not only chating but alos drink tea with my friends。

i am freshman of China University of Technology,i hope i can graduate successfully and aftere i graduate from China University of Technology, i would like to get more higher degree。

幫我檢查一下~我覺ㄉ後面一段怪怪的 急

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  • 1 decade ago
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    My english nema is cookie, chinese name is Gin,yu gun,

    我覺得在台灣 先用中文名字 在國外 先用英文名

    My name is Gin Yu Gun. I have an English name - Cookie.

    there are six people in my family,

    家庭成員用 family members

    There are six members in my family.

    my father is a civil service and mother is a house wife,i have three younger sisters。

    My father is a civil vervant and my mother is a house wife. I have three younger sisters.

    I am going to talk about my personality,i am lively and cheeriness,i like shopping and singing,not only chating but alos drink tea with my friends。

    不知 "lively and cheeriness" 指什麼 很少聽到

    我換成 樂觀 (optimist) 外向 (out going)

    I am going to talk about my personality. I am an optimist and very out going. I like to go shopping and singing. I not only like to chat with my friends but also drink tea with them.

    i am freshman of China University of Technology,i hope i can graduate successfully and aftere i graduate from China University of Technology, i would like to get more higher degree。

    學校 應該用 at

    畢業 不需要 successfully 我加上 每科(個課程 classes)都通過

    最後一句 我加上 繼續唸書 拿些更高學位

    I am a freshman at China University of Technology. I hope I can pass all my classes and graduate. After graduate from China University of Technology, I would like to continue education and get some higher degrees.

    *********

    改了一些 希望不介意

    不知 "lively and cheeriness" 指什麼 告訴我中文 我再想有什麼字可用

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  • 1 decade ago

    1.是name不是nema

    2.如果是名字的話要大寫Cookie

    3."i have three..."的i要大寫 其餘的也是

    4.cheeriness是名詞= =要用形容詞

    你可以改成cheerful

    5."i like shopping and singing,not only chating but alos drink tea with my friends"這邊有點怪唷

    可以改成"I like to sing and go shopping.I drink tea with my friends

    while chating."

    but alos 應該是 but also

    就算你拼對了也錯

    因為這是兩個連接詞同時在一起= =

    6."。"

    首先 freshman 要加個a

    是after 不是aftere

    後面的China University of Technology可以直接刪掉

    那是贅詞

    and改成句點

    of 改成 in the

    除非你是想湊字數

    再來 "get more higher degree"

    more刪掉換成a

    最後

    你的i都要改成大寫

    所以會變這樣

    "I am a freshman in the China University of Technology.I hope I can graduate successfully. After I graduate, I would like to get a higher degree."

    以上

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  • 1 decade ago

    My english nema is cookie, chinese name is Gin,yu gun,〈My name is Gin Yu Gun,and you can call me cookie,which is my English name〉there〈There〉 are six people in my family,〈.〉my〈My〉 father is a civil service and〈my〉 mother is a house wife,i〈I〉 have three younger sisters。

    〈Now〉I am going to talk about my personality,〈.〉i〈I〉 am lively and cheeriness〈cheeriness是名詞,不可用,請替換別的「形容詞」〉,i 〈I〉like〈going〉 shopping and singing,〈.〉not only chating but alos drink tea with my friends。〈And I also like chating and sometimes drinking some tea with my family.〉〈not only...but also 是有一點強調後面那個動作的效果,在此不適合〉

    i 〈I〉am〈now a〉 freshman of China University of Technology,i〈I〉 hope i〈I〉 can graduate successfully and 〈.〉aftere〈After〉 i graduate〈graduating〉 from China University of Technology, i would like to get more higher degree〈to enrich myself .〉

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  • 1 decade ago

    1. English name

    2. 兩個句子的連接光用逗點不夠,還要加上連接詞,不然就改成句點重新開始下一句

    3. I

    4. not only chating but also drinking (not only...but also連接的東西要有相同的詞性)

    5. a freshman

    6. after

    7. degrees

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