promotion image of download ymail app
Promoted

Are these good? I am not finished yet though??

What would happen?

If every bad person turned into an eagle,

Soaring through the cool, dark night sky.

Water glimmering through from the moon,

So brightly shining through the starry horizon.

You feel around your body, just to find feathers where you used to be.

Then you see everyone is an eagle.

You see, if you did something to everyone bad, you’d have to hurt yourself.

Everyone does something mean or bad once in a while, even me!!

What would happen?

If your family was in a car accident.

Everyone dead but you.

It wasn’t your fault at all,

Unless you blame yourself.

What would happen?

If you had a twin.

She didn’t go to school, as you think.

You don’t even know the other person,

Kind of like looking into mirror.

Only to see a reflection of another person.

Then you think about them.

“You are yourself.” You always tell yourself.

You hear words say your wrong.

Maybe it was your clone talking.

Looking around to see nothing, you find out.

You are your twin.

4 Answers

Relevance
  • 1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    yea those are great show them toalot of people u can get very far!! congrats!!

    • Commenter avatarLogin to reply the answers
  • 1 decade ago

    Stories have a beginning, a middle i.e. the meat of the story, and a ending.

    I would not start a story with the word IF.

    Although it implies a question it shows uncertainty.

    Resolve the questions first, then write the story, no matter how far out the story's concept might be.

    Landsman :)

    • Commenter avatarLogin to reply the answers
  • 1 decade ago

    i liked them a lot keep up the good writing

    • Commenter avatarLogin to reply the answers
  • 1 decade ago

    whats the point

    • Commenter avatarLogin to reply the answers
Still have questions? Get your answers by asking now.