Did I use the hyphens correctly? If not, can someone show me the correct way?

This is a part of a story that I'm writing:

“Why did you come here?” asked Deonte.

“I don’t need a reason to see my family.” shouted Will defensively.

“Your family?” scoffed Deonte. “You’ve abandoned us. You leave us to go to who-the-hell-knows-where to play ‘retake the kingdom’ with that old man and come back years later and call us family?

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  • Nancy
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago
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    Yes, you used them properly. Well done. With this small bit of writing, you sparked my curiosity about what is happening in the story.

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  • 1 decade ago

    You used the hyphens correctly, but have a punctuation error in the second line--it should read, "I don't need a reason to see my family," shouted Will. That is, there should be a comma, not a period, at the end of the quote.

    Also, while I'm being picky, you need to close the quotation marks on the last speaker.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Yeah, but remember to put a comma after the speech marks, and when someone is saying something, there's no full stop at the end.

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  • 1 decade ago

    Great use of hyphenation.

    Here is a website which explains use of hyphenation for compound words even more.

    http://www.grammartips.homestead.com/hyphens1.html

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  • ?
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    u need a hypen behind family

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    It's fine.

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  • 1 decade ago

    Looks good to me !!!

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