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Anonymous asked in Entertainment & MusicMusic · 1 decade ago

Rate my song?

here's another song for the general public to rate. (I should really stop doing this...) 1 - worst 10 - best & why you like/hate it.

Darling I must go for a ride

These feelings won’t subside

Five months blown on the past

They really did go by fast

And this warm sense of understanding

Flushes every molecule standing

God, if I could only make it last

Afterwards I can scream and thrash

But right now I’m standing in complete surrender

Fighting with ammunition in order to remember

Just how I felt that beginning summer…

“I’m not very good at this…”

It’s not very productive when you’re somber

The feeling makes it last much longer

I’ve imagined everyone who would stand a chance

Then I soon wake up within a trance

And I don’t feel any better

Months ago I was bitter

Years ago I was fitter

But right now I’m standing with complete surrender

Fighting with ammunition in order to remember

Just how I felt that beginning summer…

“I’m not very good at this…”

Update:

NOTE: plagiarizing of this song will lead to a severe conciquence.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    10!!!

    will you give me a 10 points too????? LOL

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    9

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  • 1 decade ago

    6.5 You have a theme, but I think you focused too much on making it rhyme than making it make sense. You said what you feel but gave no direction as to why or how. The lyrics could work... but I suggest adding one or more stanzas, either about summer or why you feel how you do... or get rid of so many descriptive words that all lead to different directions... good luck!

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  • 1 decade ago

    You spelled consequence wrong. The lyrics are fine, maybe not rhyming so much, rhyming too much gives it the feel of a nursery rhyme or kids poem.

    Good music is the combination of lyrics and the actual notes, so, listen to your favorite artists, study their techniques, learn from it, and apply it to your song.

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  • 1 decade ago

    i dont know its kinda hard without some music or heraing you voice because it doesnt matter who good the lyrics are if you cant sing or you band can play but anyway i give it an 8

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  • 1 decade ago

    That is really good if you sing good to you could probably be big in hollywood... I would buy your album.... I say a 10 and definetely keep it up!! I'll be waiting to buy it!

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  • 1 decade ago

    Good job

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  • 1 decade ago

    Sounds great! I can even kind of hear the tune in my head!

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  • 1 decade ago

    -8

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  • 1 decade ago

    thats amazing ur really good! do u hav a contract or somethin? id give it a....9

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  • 1 decade ago

    i like it ♥

    a 8.5 sounds good

    what kind of music would go with it? (just wondering)

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