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煩請高手幫我檢查英文作文(3)

大家好,煩請大家幫我檢查一下我的作文,文法或翻譯上有什麼需要修正的地方,我們老師也明白我們的程度並不是很好,所以我們並不需要有很艱深的用詞,只要表達我們中文部份的意思即可,以下是我的文章:

My name is Nancy, I am 35 years old. I have been a kindergarten’s teacher for fifteen years. I have a happy family. There were five people in my family. My husband, my son, my two daughters and me. We Live in Tai-Nan City.

我的名字南西,今年35歲,從事幼教工作十五年。我有一個美滿的家庭,我們家有四個人,我丈夫、兒子、兩個女兒和我。 我們現在住在台南市。

My first daughter names Cindy. She is twelve years old. She studies in an elementary school at sixth grade. She’s very talent in dancing. She looks like an angel when she is on the stage. She’s an easygoing girl. She likes any meal that I cook for her and that makes me have confidence in my cooking.

我的大女兒名叫Cindy,今年12歲,小學六年級。喜歡跳舞,當她在舞台上的樣子,就好像是一個天使。她是一個隨和的女孩,她喜歡我為她煮的每道菜,這讓我對自的手藝很有信心。

My second daughter names Zoe. She is ten years old. She studies in an elementary school at forth grade. She likes to go in-line skating and reading. She dislikes eating carrots very much.

我的二女兒名叫Zoe,今年10歲,今年讀小四。喜歡溜直排輪、看書。她非常討厭吃紅蘿蔔。

My son names Jay. He is eight years old. She studies in an elementary school at first grade. He’s a cute boy with big and bright eyes. He likes riding bicycle, playing computer games. His favorite food is carrot cause his birth pet is rabbit.

我的兒子叫Jay,8歲,就讀國小一年級,他有一雙大又明亮的眼睛,長得很可愛。喜歡騎腳踏車、玩電腦遊戲。因為他生肖屬兔,所以他最喜歡的食物是紅蘿蔔。

My husband is forty years old. His name is Yang. He’s a building worker. He likes to watch T.V. after work. We didn’t live with my parents in law. But we visit them in Ping-Tung

very often.

我的丈夫叫Yang ,40歲,是建築業的工人,工作之餘喜歡看視。雖然我們沒和公婆同住,但我們時常去屏東探望他們。

My husband always helps to take care of the kids when I go to school on weekend. I am appreciated for his supporting. I wish that my families would be peaceful, happy and healthy. I wish I could have great job in school.

當我週末去學校上課時,我老公總是主動幫我照顧小孩,我很感謝他的支持,我希望家人能平安、快樂、身體健康。我也期許自己能在學業上有好的表現。

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  • 1 decade ago
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    (1) 如果是要以書寫的方式,讓人家看這篇作文的話,標點符號也是很重要的。逗點必須要使用半形字,緊接再最後一個字母後面;縮寫也必須使用半形,夾在兩個字母之間。(2) 以下為個人建議的改法:(大致上不錯了)  My name is Nancy.  I am 35 years old.  I have been a teacher in a kindergarten*1 for fifteen years.  I have a happy family. There are*2 five people in my family, my*3 husband, my son, my two daughters and me. We Live in Tai-Nan City.  *1. 幼稚園老師,用a teacher in a kindergarten 比較好,當然原句用法也可以。  *2. be動詞用現在式,用過去式的話,是以前很美滿,現在可能不美滿的意思。  *3. 這個句子還沒講完,所以用逗點接續。My first daughter's name is*4 Cindy. She is twelve years old. She studies in an elementary school in the*5 sixth grade. She's very talented*6 in dancing. She looks like an angel when she is on the stage. She's an easygoing girl. She likes any meal that I cook for her and that makes me have confidence in my cooking.  *4. name 當動詞為取名字的意思,在此用其名為Cindy這樣的說法即可。  *5. 六年級的說法:in the 6th grade.  *6. 有天份的,是talented, 或gifted, 都用過去分詞。My second daughter's name is Zoe. She is ten years old. She studies in an elementary school in the forth grade. She likes to go in-line skating and reading. She dislikes eating carrots very much.My son, Jay, is*7 eight years old. He studies in an elementary school in the first grade. He's a cute boy with big and bright eyes. He likes riding a*8 bicycle, and playing computer games. His favorite food is carrot because his birth pet is rabbit.*7. 如果為了要避免重複同樣的句型,可以用同位語來介紹下一個人。*8. 可數普通名詞,如果為單數的話,必須加不定冠詞。My husband is forty years old. His name is Yang. He's a constructor*9. He likes to watch TV*10 after work. We don't*11 live with my parents on my husband's side*12. But we visit them in Ping-Tung very often.*9. 建築工人有專用的字。*10. TV已經為一個專有的字了,不用打縮寫符號。*11. 用現在式助動詞,如果用過去式的話,意思會變成現在可能住在一起了。*12. 妳的丈夫並不稱其父母親為parents-in-law, (因為主詞為我們)故用我丈夫那邊的雙親,也就是公婆的意思。My husband always to take care of the kids when I go to school on the weekend. I appreciate his supports a lot*13. I hope*14 that my family will be peaceful, happy and healthy forever and I hope I can have good performance at school*15.*13. 感謝丈夫的支持,用主動的用法即可。*14. wish 為但願的意思,會與現在的事實相反,也就是說,現在的家庭不和睦、不快樂,所以才但願家庭能夠和睦快樂,故要用hope這個字。*15. 在工作上要有好表現,用此句即可。

  • 1 decade ago

    1, There are five members in my family.......2, My big daughter is named Cindy. ....She studies in an elementary school in sixth grade. She’s very talented in dancing. She is an angel when she is on the stage. She’s an easygoing girl. She likes any meal that I cook for her, which makes me confident in my own cooking.3, My second daughter is named Zoe. She is ten years old. She studies in an elementary school in forth grade. She likes in-line skating and reading. She dislikes carrots very much.4, My son names Jay. He is eight years old. He studies in an elementary school in first grade. He’s a cute boy with big and bright eyes. He likes riding bicycle and playing computer games. His favorite food is carrot 'cause he was born in the year of rabbit, which is also his favorite animal.5, My husband is forty years old. His name is Yang. He’s a construction worker. He likes to watch T.V. after work. We don't live with my parents-in-law. But we visit them in Ping-Tung very often.6, My husband always helps take care of the kids when I go to school on weekends. I am appreciative of his support. I wish my family peaceful, happy and healthy. I wish I can have great performance in school.

    2006-10-20 16:43:23 補充:

    "名字叫做...", 是必須用 "is named...".

    "was named..." 就變成 "以前叫做..." 或 "以前稱為..."

    "names.... " 只能用於第三人稱單數 "命名..." 或 "稱之為..." 時方可用之. 例如 : He "names" his baby son Henry.

    2006-10-22 01:12:35 補充:

    沒有 "birth pet" 這種用法的.

    還是應該改成 "he was born in the year of rabbit, which is also his favorite animal."

  • 1 decade ago

    My name is Nancy, I am 35 years old. I have been a kindergarten teacher for fifteen years. I have a happy family. There are five people in my family. My husband、my son、my two daughters and me. We Live in Tai-Nan City.

    My first daughter was named Cindy. She is twelve years old. She studies in an elementary school at sixth grade. She likes dancing very much. She looks like an angel when she was on the stage. She’s an easygoing girl. She likes any meal what I cook for her and that makes me have confidence in my cooking.

    My second daughter was named Zoe. She is ten years old. She studies in an elementary school at forth grade. She likes to go in-line skating and reading . She dislikes eating carrots very much.

    My son was named Jay. He is eight years old. She studies in an elementary school at first grade. He’s a cute boy with big and bright eyes. He likes riding bicycle、playing computer games. His favorite food is carrot because his Chinese birth pet is rabbit.

    My husband is forty years old. His name is Yang. He’s a building worker. He likes to watch T.V. after work. We didn’t live with my parents in law, but we visit them very often in Ping-Tung.

    My husband always helps to take care of children when I go to school on weekend. I am really appreciated for his supporting. I wish that my family could be peaceful、happy and healthy. I wish I could have great job in school.

     

    這是我改的,如果有錯也請大家指教一下!謝謝~

    btw,為什麼字不能變色?

    Source(s): myself
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