我的英文自傳 哪裡有文法錯誤或語意不通順

My name is Jenny. I am 18 years old and female. I was born and raised in Kaohsiung, a beautiful city. My blood type is B and my constellation is Leo. There are six people in my family including me, and I am the oldest one in my family. This summer, I freshed from NAN-TZE senior high school. Now I am a freshman. I am an optimistic and aggressive person.

It is fortunate for me on the road of learning. In the past, my grade is not very excellent, but my achievements always keep average level. All the subjects, my course is English. I have learned English 7 years. Learning foreign language is always my interest and my goal. Because I think it is interesting to say one thing via different sounds. And also to absorb knowledge both in and outside of classroom and share it with people who have the same interest as me. I also like athletics. I always play basketball when I have free time or I feel depressed.

Although I am an optimistic person, I still have low tide. Whenever I feel depressed or unhappy, I will play basketball. It will make me forget those discouraging matters temporarily. What’s more playing basketball is also good way for physical fitness. I also prepare a bottle. I get a bottle and speak out my feelings into the bottle, and then cover the lid of the bottle. Later on I will shake the bottle with all my efforts. Afterwards. I could pour my bad feelings into the toilet and push the flush handle. By doing so, all depressing matters seem to be far away from me.

In the future, I want to improve my English ability. The most I want to do is pass the graduate school examination. I expect myself that I can work hardly in my university life. In conclusion, I also hope one day I could accomplish my dream which is to become a well-trained courier.

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    My name is Jenny. I am a 18-year-old girl. I was born and raised in Kaohsiung, a beautiful city. My blood type is B and my horoscope is Leo. There are six people in my family, and I am the oldest child. This summer, I graduated from NAN-TZE Senior High School. Now, I am a freshman.

    I am an optimistic and self-driven person. (aggressive 的字義是 有野心的進取) I have been fortunate in my journey of learning. In the past, my grades were never excellent, but I always managed to maintain them around the average level. Among all the subjects, my favorite would be English. (我猜你想說 所有科目裡 我最喜歡英文) I have studied English for 7 years. Studying foreign languages has always been my interest and goal. It is interesting to express one idea though different languages. In addition, it allows me to absorb knowledge both in and out of the classroom, and to share it with people with the same interest.

    I am also athletic. I usually play basketball whenever I have spare time, or whenever I feel depressed. Although I am an optimistic person, there are still times that I feel down. Whenever I felt depressed or unhappy, I would play basketball. It will makes me forget those discouraging matters for the moment. Moreover, playing basketball is also good for my physical fitness. (建議之前加一句介紹; There is also another thing I do when I feel down.) I would prepare a bottle; I would speak my heart out into the bottle, and then cover the lid of the bottle. Then I would shake the bottle with all my efforts. Afterwards, I would pour my bad feelings into the toilet and push the flush handle. By doing so, all the depressing things would seem to go away from me.

    I would like to improve my English, and pass the graudate school examination in the future. I hope that I can work hard in my college life (hard 跟 hardly 差很多) In conclusion, I also hope that one day I can accomplish my dream, which is to become a well-trained courier.

    文法錯誤不多 只是最後突然跳一句新的 有點摸不著頭腦 基本上只需要多閱讀英文 強調文法之外 還要注意一些比較死板的英文句型模式 (像是用because 通常有兩個句子)

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  • 1 decade ago

    My name is Jenny and I am 18 years old. I was born and raised in Kaohsiung, a beautiful city. My blood type is B and my zodiac sign is Leo.

    There are six members in my family, and I am the oldest among my siblings. This summer, I was graduated from NAN-TZE senior high school.

    Now I am a freshman.

    I am an optimistic and aggressive person.

    It is fortunate for me on the road of learning. In the past, my grade is not very excellent, but my achievements always keep average level. I have learned English for the past 7 years. Learning foreign language is always my interest and my goal. Because I think it is interesting to say one thing through different language.

    And also to absorb knowledge both in and outside of classroom and share it with people who have the same interest as me. I also like athletics. I play basketball when I have free time or I feel depressed.

    Although I am an optimistic person, I still feel down sometimes. Playing basketball makes me forget those discouraging matters temporarily. What’s more playing basketball is also good way for physical fitness. I also prepare a bottle. I get a bottle and speak out my feelings into the bottle, and then cover the lid of the bottle. Later on I will shake the bottle with all my efforts. Afterwards. I could pour my bad feelings into the toilet and push the flush handle. By doing so, all depressing matters seem to be far away from me.

    In the future, I want to improve my English ability. The most I want to do is pass the graduate school examination. I expect myself that I can work hardly in my university life. In conclusion, I also hope one day I could accomplish my dream which is to become a well-trained courier

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