靜文 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

A Famous Leader

This is my essay. I know it is not so good. I hope there would be someone to revise it and give me some advises. Thank you very much!!

A famous leader

Gandhi, the famous leader in the world, headed up the well known campaign- Noncooperation Movement. Gandhi was born in India where was occupied by England. As a Hindu, he was anxiety to save his people from being colonized every minute and every moment. He devoted his whole life to resist England by undertaking Noncooperation Movement .

In my opinion, Gandhi was definitely an outstanding leader. I admire him not only his courage but also his pacifism . We could say that he chose the right way to resist England. If we were at his shoes, we might have made a violent stand.

There is no disputed that Gandhi is the ideal of pacifist.

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    If this is an essay, is it too short? I think you can add more information to introduce Gandhi and the campaign that he held. That would make this essay more stronger.

    I revise some parts of your essay, and you can see them as reference.

    Gandhi, the most famous leader in the world, was born in 1869 in India where was

    occupied by England and headed up the well-known campaign- Non-cooperation

    Movement. It was the activity that .......... As a Hindu, he was anxiety to save his people

    from being colonized every minute and every moment. He devoted his whole life to

    resist England by undertaking Noncooperation Movement .

    In my opinion, Gandhi was definitely an outstanding leader. I admire him for not only

    his courage but also his pacifism . It seems that he chose the right way to resist

    England. If we were at his shoes, we might have made a violent stand. He is sainted.

    Thus, there is no disputed that Gandhi is the ideal of pacifist.

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