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Due to the ever-increasing divorce rate, people should not get married but rather stay single and only live in partnerships.

In the modern world the marriage is just proven as divorced phenomena, it seems that people get married only for divorce. Some general people to high standard people, who are not content with their marriages, seek for a way out from this boundary despite the fact that they feel extremely restricted and encounter the unsatisfied relationship. Therefore, this essay will explain the fundamental reasons for why people should not get married but rather stay single and only live in partnerships.

First, remaining with a partnership relation is always better than getting married in order to have own freedom. From the time of birth, a person always seeks freedom because there is nothing more important than freedom. Even animals seek freedom: they want to get out from the zoos or the cages. Marriage is a boundary that people cannot get away easily from, despite one’s desperately willing to get out. In fact, when one engages or involves in marriage one’s freedom is swept away. Even though divorce can make them free from the paper or law, backward people (people from backward society) could not get divorced because of someone’s threatening or they also might not know such law is existed which can make them free from this boundary. As a result, they must live with one’s husband or wife whether or not they feel so miserable and sometimes desire to commit suicide. Therefore, remaining only in partnership is always good since law cannot bind them; furthermore, a person living in partnership has more choices out of life than a married person does.

Next, in order to be free from law and losing one’s own property only remaining in partnership is the best way. Once a person gets married generally, one’s property becomes the property of couple or both. Thus, taking advantage of it one’s who is not the real owner of that property can file for the divorce hoping he/she could gain half of it. Whether or not its lawful the owner could not restrain it from being divided. On the other, being only as partnership the property is always in the secure phenomena. Indeed, it doesn’t bring the shame to related family and to society though they break up as such event sometimes would bring shameful circumstances to family and society.

Finally, although opponents assert that marriage always secure to women in some countries including Asian countries such as India, Nepal, Bhutan etc. it is often domination to women because those women, who lost their husbands, always are forced to wear white cloths; it means that they could not get married again, and also they are even treated as bad as imaginary witch; saying that their husbands pass away because of their evilness. Other reason why marriage is domination to women is, they have to write Mrs. whereas men don’t demonstrate their title that other could know whether they are married or not. Therefore, marriage is harmful to one’s life, family, and society.

In conclusion, as the marriage is restriction, domination, freedom loser , its always better to stand far apart from marriage. To be exemplary or good family in the society love is extremely important rather than only sign paper that might contain numbers of conspiracies. If fact, if people do not be aware of all these things more suicidal cases, crimes, discriminations, and peace-less atmosphere will increase rapidly.

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  • joe
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago
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    id hate to be your instuctor, your page is riddled with errors of either spelling or misuses of words. i am the worst at writing, but i know alot of the mistakes you made are very obviouse. too many to list, and you didnt convince me, nor did you evensend a slightest of breeze to sway my thoughts on marriage verses no marriage....... i started to cut and paste but there is no way to list it all, but just for giggles sake animals do marry it may not be the same as with a peice of paper but they commit and to try and equate the zoo and animals pens to marriage is almost silly . no to mention if you are smart enough to get married and you havnt a clue about the laws regarding divorce..... then you tooo stupid and should lay in the bed you made.....before you put in facts you might want to look at them and do some seriouse fact checking as crime is less compared to married and non married...... add on the fact that whether you marry or just commit to playing married your still in a commited relationship and you have free will to leave or stay.............. if i was your instructor you would fail miserably but hey as you can tell im not

  • Okay well here you go, you have to seek out the corrections in this one::

    Due to the ever-increasing divorce rate, people shouldn't get married, but rather stay single and only live in partnerships.

    In the modern world, the marriage is just proven as divorced phenomena, and it seems likely that people get married only for divorce. Some general people to high standard people, who are not content with their marriages, seek for a way out from this boundary despite the fact that they feel extremely restricted and encounter the unsatisfied relationship. Therefore, this essay will explain the fundamental reasons for why people should not get married, but instead should stay single and only live in partnerships.

    Initially, remaining with a partnership relation is always better than getting married in order to have your own freedom. From the time of birth, a person always seeks freedom because there is nothing more important. Animals also seek freedom: they struggle to get out from the zoos or the cages. Marriage is a boundary that people cannot easily get away from, despite one’s desperately willing to get out. In fact, when one engages or involves in marriage, one’s freedom is swept away. Even because divorce can make people free from the paper or law, backward people (people from backward society) could not get divorced because of someone’s threatening or they also might not know such law is existed which can make them free from this boundary. As a result, they must live with one’s husband or wife whether or not they feel so miserable and sometimes desire to commit suicide. Therefore, remaining only in partnership is always good since law cannot bind them; furthermore, a person living in partnership has more choices out of life than a married partner does.

    Afterword, in order to be free from law and losing one’s own property only remaining in partnership is the best way. Once a person gets married generally, one’s property becomes the property of the couple or both. Thus, taking advantage of it one’s who is not the real owner of the property can file for the divorce hoping he/she could gain half of it. Whether or not its lawful, the owner could not restrain it from being divided. On the other, being only as partnership the property is always in the secure phenomena. Indeed, it doesn’t bring the shame to related family and to society though they break up as such event sometimes would bring shameful circumstances to family and society.

    Before long, although opponents assert that marriage always secure to women in some countries including Asian countries such as India, Nepal, Bhutan, etc., it is often domination to women because those women, who lost their husbands, always are forced to wear white cloths; which means that they could not marry again, and also they are even treated as bad as an imaginary witch; saying that their husbands pass away because of their evilness. Yet another reason why marriage is domination to women is, they have to write Mrs. whereas men don’t demonstrate their title that other could know whether they are married or not. Therefore, marriage is harmful to one’s life, family, and society.

    In conclusion, as the marriage is restriction, domination, freedom loser , its always better to stand far apart from marriage. To be exemplary or good family in the society love is extremely important, rather than only sign paper that might contain numbers of conspiracies. If fact, if people do not be aware of all these more suicidal cases, crimes, discriminations, and peace-less atmosphere, will increase rapidly.

    You're a very good writer, and although I did not agree with your opinion, I thought you were very convincing. You just needed to check because I had to add a few commas, there were no spelling mistakes, I did make a few things a little stronger in your writing, but your essay was fantastic!!

    Hope that helped! Good luck with whatever you're doing♥♥

  • 1 decade ago

    Unfortunately attitudes toward marriage are steeped in traditions which at times are backwards when viewed in today's world. To me some of the keys to longevity in marriage today are tolerance, patience and respect. All are commodities are in short supply today.

    In large measure there must be a common respect for each partner in a relationship or it is doomed to failure. Whether you are still married or divorced really does not matter if there is a loss of respect for the other person. With respect for the partner's integrity comes the freedom you desire through simply cohabiting. It is not necessary to formally marry if the proper attitude prevails. Nor is it necessary to divorce if the proper attitude prevails.

  • 1 decade ago

    A LOT OF WHAT YOU SAY IS TRUE!! BUT YOU'RE CONCLUSION IS ALL WRONG ... AT LEAST TO ME. MARRIAGE IS A RELATIONSHIP WHERE GIVE AND TAKE MUST BE FOLLOWED BY BOTH PARTNERS! NO ONE SHOULD BE OVER RULING OR TO DOMINATE THAT THE OTHER IS OVER-SHADOWED. TO MANY PEOPLE GET MARRIED FOR THE WRONG REASONS OR THEY GET MARRIED TO FAST. IT TAKES A COUPLE OF YEARS TO REALLY KNOW SOME ONE THAT WELL OR MAYBE MORE. IF SOME ONE IS PRESSURING THE MARRIAGE IT IS EVEN WORSE. COMMUNICATION IS THE KEY!!!! IF TWO PEOPLE HAVE HONEST TALKS AND DISCUSSIONS ANY THING IS POSSIBLE!

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    you are confused. world is not what you see it like. remember man is social animal.

    so such animal should be tied or else he should go and live in jungle not among people.

  • lily
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago

    Sorry couldn't get past the first 21 words.

  • 1 decade ago

    "...it seems that people get married only for divorce"

    I stopped reading right there.

  • 1 decade ago

    I'm with aqua_regi....

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