InTaiwain,having my own motorcycle is a fantastic thing.However,this vehicle would do us both harm and good.On its positive side ,It allows us to travel wherever we like,particularly in some places not provided by public transportation.Secondly,its smaller size may be the most special feature that make this machine so popular.You can park your motorcycle anywhere for a while,and leave easily whenever you want.Let alone ,everone can afford to buy one because of its cheaper expense.
On the other hand,its negative effectshas alsobeen a worth thinking problem.Compared with other transportation ,It comsumes our gas resources seriously. Besides,The smoke emitted also destroy our air condition increasingly.This phenomenon has resulted in a series of lung diseases to be one of top-10 causes of death in Taiwain.You would have never imagine that a large amount of motorcucles couldbring such serious result.To sum up ,convenient as it is, we still need to confess its awful drawback.If we don't improve it,the problem will expand in the future and influence our next generation.
- 1 decade agoFavorite Answer
記得英文注重於精簡(simple and to the point)
取段: InTaiwain,having my own motorcycle is a fantastic thing.However,this vehicle (問題: what vehicle?) would do us (問題: who?) both harm and good.On its (問題: what?) positive side ,I(小寫i 因為這不是句子開頭)t allows us to travel wherever we like,particularly in some places (問題: what places? be specific) not provided by public transportation.Secondly,its smaller size may be the most special feature that make this machine so popular. (問題: why? its size benefit the user in what way??)
例第一句 也是你的topic sentense可以寫成
"Owning a motocyle is a fantastic thing in Taiwan, but it also causes bad effects on our society." (之前就已經說過有摩托車是一件好事了 所以第二句就不用再講一次. 以你的能力可以盡量不要用中文的文法來思考英文寫作: "例: 在台灣, blah blah blah.." 還有this vehicle就變成你在指特別一輛機車而不是機車這件交通工具 要寫 the vehicle 或連the都不要)
Looking from a positive perspective, it is a transportation that saves us time and provides with great convenience. Its smaller size also allows the riders to.....blah blah blah"
(使用first, secondly, thirdly的列式會讓作文有枯燥的感覺 再來就是盡量要用比較切身的形容詞以及名詞 例perspective, transportation, convenience 你這一段給我的感覺是摩托車的尺寸小比他的方面重要 但你卻把這件事情擺第二句 重量失橫)
先改這一段 其他請依照建議試著寫寫看 這樣對你的寫作能力會有所進步
最後 如果要寫的是短文 建議至少寫三段 基本作文型式
第一段: introduction 寫你的topic sentence(主題) 寫摩托車有好也有壞 大概說明為什麼
第二段: body 深入描寫你在第一段大綱裡所說的 舉出例子證明你的想法
第三段: conclusion 做總結 寫你發現了什麼 寫你覺得大家應該要怎麼做 或 希望讀者對於你的作文有什麼想法
good luck and hopefully this will help! :)Source(s): 住在美國的阿米巴
- 1 decade ago
In Taiwan, it is considered a fantastic thing to own a motorcycle for commuters. It could help a lot in our daily life, however, it also influence the environment in negative way.
We could ride the motorcycle to everywhere we want and no need to care about it provides public transportation or not. Unlike cars, we don’t have to wastes time searching for parking lot when we arrive our destination. Besides, it is much easier to move forward when most drivers are caught in traffic jam.
However, it can’t be denied that we also spoil the clean air when we choose to ride a motorcycle rather than taking the MRT. It consumes gas seriously and becomes air pollution that brings harmful elements to our health so that lung diseases has been in the first 10 death origin in Taiwan. We could never imagine those sequent drawback that may cause from the fantastic thing we think, riding a motorcycle. This kind of pollution would never been decreasing until we find a way to stop its expansion, meanwhile we also have to care about those inconvenience or expense for commuters and riders if the gas alternative is compelled to be used.
2006-09-16 23:18:17 補充：
寫錯字to 後面加原型動詞to waste, 不是 to wasteslung diseases haVE, 不是 hasSource(s): sorry