Our teacher asked us to write a catolog poem, and I am not sure if my poem is good enough for her standard... I am thinking if you can give me some advice about the poem I wrote, that will be great.
Dream at day and night
To be with sun, moon and light
Dream under the sea with fish
To feel the coldness of lonely
Dream in the roses like Thumbelina
To see the world of Andersen
Out to the South Pole
Into the tropical rain forest
Dream under the aerosphere
To feel the mass of the air
Dream with the gravity
To feel the strongness of earth
Dream on grass with butterflies
To be relieved from busyness
Over the ground
Under the sky
I am dreamming from dark to light
Dream under the sea with fish 的下一句 To feel the coldness of lonely.很怪, 有沒有更好的代替?
我不知道這算不算違規, 因為我只是\"請教\", 並不是 \"找人幫忙做\" 我的功課
- jennifer lLv 51 decade agoFavorite Answer
Dreams during the day and during the night,
Dream with the sun, the moon, and the stars.
Dream under the sea, and swim with the fishes
Dream upon the sky when flying with the birds
Dreams inside a rose like Thumbelina
at the world of Andersen
Dreams out at the South Pole
at the tropical rain forest
Dreams can go to the outer space
To feel the infinity
Dreams can travel the whole wide world
To feel the expansiveness
I am the dreamers’ dream.
- ?Lv 71 decade ago
Catalog poem doesn't have any format, you'd just "itemize" what you see, smell, hear and feel line by line.Dreaming day and night,Bright stars shine in the velvet sky,Fishes rove in the deep blue ocean,Gulping the taste of loneliness in the dark,My Cold, shivering and bloodless body,Thriving roses, Chirping birds,Amid me wandering in the world of Anderson,South Pole is pale and white,Tropical rain forest is vivid and wet,Lying under the magical aerosphere,Falling with gravity,Feeling the mass of air,Mixing the color of wind,Suddenly,A red monster face in the spider web,He is bleeding and frowning,My heart is bumping, My blood is pumping,Running and screaming,Falling out of bed,My dream is from dark to light.