幫我看一下英文作文....有關immortality

不好意思... 我今天中午以前就要了.. 麻煩幫我看一下有什麼問題... 感激不盡!! Immortality means that a person can keep her body always young. She doesn’t worry the white hair and the wrinkles. Perhaps the one can ride the roller coaster to enjoy the excitement without the heart disease happen. She can eat what she want and don’t be afraid the... show more 不好意思...
我今天中午以前就要了..

麻煩幫我看一下有什麼問題...
感激不盡!!
Immortality means that a person can keep her body always young. She doesn’t worry the white hair and the wrinkles. Perhaps the one can ride the roller coaster to enjoy the excitement without the heart disease happen. She can eat what she want and don’t be afraid the digestive system makes her uncomfortable. In addition, she is full of energy to do everything and doesn’t need to afraid when she will tire. Nothing will stop her.

However, there is not everything going well with the young body. Some disadvantages are bothering the young person. First, she must depend upon her own ability to support herself. So, she has to work hard. And because of that, she can’t accept the old person annuity. Second, the one will not cherish the young times. Human beings often don’t understand to seize the day. Moreover this young condition will be able to cause the matter more serious.

On other hand, the young person may lack some kind of experiences. The becoming older is the main key. The one who is never old is impossible to realize the age’s worry. In some degrees, her life would lack processes like old. Maybe it is not everyone want to experience. But as the human we know, we have a life with several unhappy、some things unsuitable and even have to prepare to know that we will old and die.

No one can young forever. But the matter has the possibility to be able to occur in future days. Until that day becoming, we may actually see problems beyond our imagination.
1 answer 1