有關英請問英文文法還不錯的人,能幫我修改文法嗎???????

For the past decade, Internet had increased its development; it had great impact in every way to our daily life. However the negative impacts of what the Internet had brought to us had bow gradually discussing among the society. Nowadays, Internet has developed a close relationship with the teenagers in the case their learning, entertainment and social activities. The consequences of children become addicted to the Internet, parents and educators should take a positive and constructive attitude in order to make the proper precaution and counseling system.

以下的中文:近十年來網路科技蓬勃發展,各應用層面已深入人們的日常生活之中,但網路所帶來的負面影響已漸漸浮現並廣泛被討論。對於e世代青少年,網路已與他們的學習、娛樂、社交活動緊密結合,面對孩子們網路成癮的的可能,家長們及教育人員應有正向積極的態度,採適當的措施來預防及輔導。

能盡快給我答覆嗎???

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  • 1 decade ago
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    錯的地方幫你用大寫修正囉

    For the past decade, Internet haS EXPANDED its use(DEVELOPMENT 是 開發或是創造, 如果用DEVELOPMENT的話意思會變的怪); it haS great impact in every way to our daily life. However the negative impacts of what the Internet had brought us has emerged gradually to our concern (or discussion) discussing 不是這樣用 among the society. Nowadays, Internet has developed a close relationship with the teenagers in the case OF their learning, entertainment and social activities. The consequences of children becomING addicted to the Internet (這裡後面要接前面說的CONSEQUENCES是什麼) HAS TO BE CONSIDERED, parents and educators should take a positive and constructive attitude in order to make the proper precaution and counseling system.

    Source(s): my sagittal half of brain
  • 1 decade ago

    我認為你這一篇並沒有地方需要改,我也順便把我的意見貼上

    Network science and technology has grown vigorously in the past ten years, each used the aspect to deepen in daily life, but the reverse side influence that the network brought had already appeared and been discussed extensively gradually. To the generation teenagers of e, the network has been already combined closely with their study, amusement, social activity, in the face of child network to become addiction possibility, parents educate person have to the positive attitude, adopt the proper measure to prevent and coach.

    Source(s): 自己
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