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目前大三夜間應英請幫我edit英文自傳,謝謝! My name is huifen Tseng. I was born in 1983 in Taoyaun. There are six members in my family, including my father, my mother, one sister and two brothers. I am the reserved but easygoing. In my friends opinion, I am reliable, curious and warm-hearted. In addition, I will give them suggestion... show more 目前大三夜間應英請幫我edit英文自傳,謝謝!
My name is huifen Tseng. I was born in 1983 in Taoyaun. There are six members in my family, including my father, my mother, one sister and two brothers.

I am the reserved but easygoing. In my friends opinion, I am reliable, curious and warm-hearted. In addition, I will give them suggestion and advice when they are something weighing on their mind. They also consider I am a strong-minded but I think I can stand firm but bring stubborn into being is better. This all is attributed to our parents so that an elder think I am a polite and decent child.

After graduating, I study the apartment of Applied English in Kainan University . The course in AE is more theoretical and I have also learned English writing, English reading and Japanese and so forth.

During my college, I am not only studying but reading. Moreover, I have learned something interesting to study. In my spare time, I am listening to music, reading and tasting delicious food. Besides, when I concentrate my attention on assignment, I match up music to achieve the best efficiency. There is also a way to smooth over my stress to taste delicacies.

Although I work my way through part-time job does not take a long term, but I always did my best to complete and achieve each assignment. I have a steadfast and aggressive character with strong spirit to serve and good in team player with desire to learn. Maybe I am not a person of intellect, but I must be trying my best to learn everything and receive the challenge. I sincerely hope that I have the honor to work in your company. Thank you very much for your kind attention.
Update: 壞壞熊請問你是主管嗎?
而且個人認為英文有些口語...
Update 2: 我的名字叫***,於民國*年生,在世外桃源的**長大。家中共有六位成員,父親從事...
Update 3: 我是個沉穩且容易相處的人,朋友覺得我很友善、樂於助人也認為我是一個非常好的聆聽者...
畢業後,繼續升學****攻讀應用外語系,應外系的課程比較偏理論方面,在目前求...
大學生涯中,除了研讀功課外,最喜歡的就是閱讀,也會對於一些有興趣的事情進而學...
Update 4: 雖然每一次的打工時間並很長,但是每一份工作我都盡全力完成而努力去學習,希望有機會... 公司工作,我或許不是最優秀的人才,但我絕對有學習的精神和毅力。我不怕辛苦,願意接... 公司能給我一個機會去學習、嘗試。謝謝!
Update 5: 我的英文自傳被說的一文不值>
Update 6: 唉唷!不然我要怎麼寫啊?
讀夜間部,本來就沒有社團
個人有飯店駐百貨公司的餐廳打工當服務員的經驗後來還因升學而未繼續(正職人員-...
還有之前在本土銀行派遣行政助理學到如何開例重要文件
但時間大約都半年
請問外商公司如何進去?
可以學到東西嗎?需要有什麼能力?
麻煩指教
不要刪掉你的補充說明啊!
Update 7: 應該是本土銀行...
還有,個人不小心洩漏一些不該寫的東西
Update 8: 壞壞熊還是麻煩看一下,但最近在趕一些assignment
所以
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