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麻煩幫我檢查一下這篇英文短文~

 

This book is Adeline\'s autobiography.

Adeline have four brothers and sisters, and she was the youngest child in her family. Her mother dead after her birth, then soon her father got married to a beautiful woman who has a French father and a Chinese mother. When her stepmother entered her family, she experienced many unfair and harsh conditions. Her stepmother didn\'t give her money to take tram, so she had to walk long way to school. And twe events happened that worsensd her relationship with her stepmother. Her father hardly paid attention on her, his brother James was her only friend. Adeline was very unhappy and lonely, she almost became an orphan. After she had won first prize in a play-writing competition, her father let her go to England with James to study medicine. She fell in love with her teacher Karl there, but finally she had to leave him because the relationship between them had failed. In 1963, she left England for Hong Kong. Afterward, she had a tragic marriage, but finally she found her happiness and love.

麻煩幫我檢查一下有沒有需要改正的地方,文法、句型、拼字、用字、時態.......等。希望大家幫幫忙 ~ 謝謝!

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謝謝小朱的鼓勵~︿︿*

原來我錯了這麼多地方 謝謝大家的解答

真的很謝謝~

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  • 1 decade ago
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    There are only some pretty slight mistakes in this article. I pasted the corrected article as below for your reference, as those amendments in the quotation marks.

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    This book is Adeline's autobiography.

    Adeline "had" four brothers and sisters, and she was the youngest child in her family. Her mother "passed away" after her birth, "and then" soon her father got married to a beautiful woman who has a French father and a Chinese mother. When her stepmother entered her family, she experienced many unfair and harsh conditions. Her stepmother didn't give her money to take tram, so she had to walk "a" long way to school. And twe(? are you meaning "two"?) events happened that "worsened" her relationship with her stepmother. Her father hardly paid attention "to" her "so" his brother James was her only friend. Adeline was very unhappy and lonely, she almost became an orphan. After she had won first prize in a play-writing competition, her father let her go to England with James to study medicine. She fell in love with her teacher Karl there, but finally she had to leave him because the relationship between them had failed. In 1963, she left England for Hong Kong. Afterward, she had a tragic marriage, but finally she found her happiness and love.

    Source(s): myself
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  • 1 decade ago

    This book is Adeline's autobiography.

    Adeline have four brothers and sisters, and she was 改成 Is (前後時態要一致)the youngest child in her family.

    Her mother dead 改成died(用過去式,dead是形容詞) after her birth, 用.(因為兩句話主詞不一,句子又太長) Then, her father soon got married to a beautiful woman who has a French father and a Chinese mother. When her stepmother entered her family, she experienced many unfair and harsh conditions. Her stepmother didn't give her money to take tram, so she had to walk 加a long way to school. And two (拼字修正)events happened that worsened(拼字修正) her relationship with her stepmother. Her father hardly paid attention on her, and her(連接詞與拼字) brother James was her only friend. Adeline was very unhappy and lonely. She almost became an orphan. After she had won first prize in a play-writing competition, her father let her go to England with James to study medicine. She fell in love with her teacher Karl there, but finally she had to leave him because the relationship between them had failed.(這一句語意不清喔) In 1963, she left England for Hong Kong. Afterward, she had a tragic marriage. But finally, she found her happiness and love.(需要詳細說明一下什麼是她的快樂和愛情)

    2006-02-27 23:47:54 補充:

    希望你看得懂括弧的地方就是我的意見啦請參考囉

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  • 1 decade ago

    算是不錯.我想你應該也努力過一陣子ㄌ吧

    加油

    辛苦ㄌ!

    Source(s): 自己
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